So, everybody else already commented on your mistakes, but even with the errors it was a great story. Someone mentioned Monty Python and the Holy Grail, and I definitely agree! That was the first thing that came to mind. This story really made me laugh. Good job. And I agree that if you make a continuation, I would read it.
A non-writing writer is a monster courting insanity. -Kafka
I don't get that. Why did they become blood red? You should have just made them blood red in the first place. But otherwise, great story..... AND KEEP WRITING!!!!!!
“There’s no point in being grown up if you can’t act a little childish sometimes.”-The Fourth Doctor "Who I was, what I did, that's not who I am." - Castiel "Friends protect you." - John Watson
i thought it was really violent with a very funny twist to it! Just the way i like it! I think you did a great job turning every little girl's favorite animal(other than a pony) into an evil creature of DOOM!! I thought it was kind of short, but I still loved it. It made me laugh, so Great Job!! keep writing!
