God's Creation

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I am a Christian, and believe everything I have written. A lot was inspired by the beginning of Genesis. I just love to think of God's amazing creation, and wanted to write about it in some way. Please no rude comments from those of you who do not believe what I believe. The actual work...I'm iffy about. Is it written strangely? Did I just 'list' the beginnings of creation? I dunno. Please, please, tell me what you think, of the actual work, if not the content! THANKS!! :) *huge grin*


In the beginning

There was God.

A sole Spirit; pure emptiness before time began.

No atmosphere
No living thing
Nothing.

The Spirit of God became lonely; no essence there was, to shine on His Power. Obsolescence to bring Him glory, for in this utter oblivion, before His Creation –

Humans
Animals
The world.


There was null and void, existence a joke, for silence to laugh at.
So He, Author of the World, began…

Into the face of the deep, a Voice spoke –

Day
Night
The firmament …

Materialized at His command.

Water
Earth
Growing things.

He saw that everything was good.

Continued His Art:

. Moon
Stars
The sun.

Animals of every kind, species to rule the skies, seas, and lands.

It was good.

A single thing was left – us.

The Omnipotent Ruler, with a care beyond fabrication,
Begat humans…
in His own image.


Our Father founded us…
for His own glory
.
A living world.

A masterpiece of all preeminence, an exalted phenomenon -

No solitary entity can compare to

God’s Creation.
Have I not commanded thee? Be strong and of good courage; be not afraid, neither be thou dismayed, for the lord thy God is with thee whithersoever thou goest.




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I'm athesist and don't believe in God, but I love the way you have written it and it's very powerful. You have an amazing writing style and very good grammar. You obviously are very passionate about this and I think that is what makes this a fabulous piece; if you don't believe in something it doesn't have the amount of care that you have used. Keep writing like this.
-Wolfie




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Well done.

Keep Writing,
~FW~
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~When you do the common things in life in an uncommon way, you will command the attention of the world. ~ George Carver

Writing...they claim it is a dangerous occupation... 'they' have no idea!




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personally i'm unceratin about the existence of God but this depiction is beautiful. I love the way you have fragmented it. I try to do this kind of thing with my stuff sometimes but never particularly successfully. It's a really good piece of work and I really enjoyed reading it.
Dreams come in waves
to take us home
Daylight stitches our eyes open
and we flicker on
-Eyes stitched open:The Telegraphs



You are beautiful because you let yourself feel, and that is a brave thing indeed.
— Shinji Moon