Bloody Queens and the Matriarch in General

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Picture perfect.
Eyes so wide.
An earnest smile
that festers lies.
A snake, a shad,
A vine, a mask.
A doll-faced queen.
A masked fiend.
Piercing wind.
Twisted branch.
An "innocent" victim.
A "simple" child.

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My favorite poem, mostly because I was crazy when I wrote this. So, I know exactly what it's about and I wanna see if you all know, or get it at least. And I have to say this so no one calls me crazy. I am perfectly sane now. Thank you and please give me your comments. NOT MEANT TO BE LITERAL!!!
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Hey,

First off, I don't get, so please tell me :L

Next I think length needs adding as i felt like i was just reading an oppening.

Next emotion; there is none. I think it needs a lot of emotion to appeal to people.

That would then give you a poem, then you could get more advice, but I think this is a solid start and could be pretty awesome.

Keep it up and PM me for anything at all.

~Retro Disco666
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~Francoise Sagan




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Hmmm.... I kind of like it!

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