Alzheimer's Past

Some might say it is a long goodbye
Filled with sadness
And depressed sighs
All your hope is gone and passed
Mourning for your love or friend
But do not fret my dear
For once they go
They'll have peace
Far and low

Hey Peachy!

I love this, it was short, and cute and sincere. It carried a giant backpack of emotion and delivered it straight to the porch of the reader. One problem I had, was I felt it ended a little too early. "Far and low" just seemed such an odd place to stop to me. I wish for a line or two more.... The last problem was with punctuation, it is just a pet peeve of mine.

Some might say it is a long goodbye,
Filled with sadness,
And depressed sighs.
All your hope is gone and passed,
Mourning for your love or friend;
But do not fret my dear,
For once they go,
They'll have peace;
Far and low.

Beyond that it was pretty much perfect, so yeah.... Hope I was of help, and let me know if you have any questions!

~HostofHorus

I really liked it. Very deep in soul

hi! I'm Pointe and I'll be reviewing you today!

Some might say it is a long goodbye,
Filled with sadness.
And depressed sighs.
All your hope is gone and passed,
Mourning for your love or friend.
But do not fret my dear,
For once they go,
They'll have peace.
Far and low.

Okay,
For a new member this poem is extemly good!
Congrats!
As Anubis said This is full of soul and very deep, I can see what you mean, but your not out right teling us, your letting us lead our own conclusions.

~Pointe