The Liar

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Dear World,
Do you honestly think
I don’t want to stop?
If I had a choice,
Do you truly believe,
I would choose this?
I can’t do anything
At all,
I’ve tried,
I have.

I can see your eyes
Looking into mine
And I know what you think
I know what you see,
It can’t be ignored
It’s far too obvious.
But the ignorance is grating,
Your judgment unjust.
I never got a say
In what I’d become.

I have heard what people claim:
Freak,
Weird,
Strange.
It’s not my fault.
I’d stop if I could.
I want to, I do.

Live a day,
You will know,
You really will.
So don’t say, I’m just too weak.
I don’t want attention.
I’m not one of those.
I do want control.

It hurts,
On the inside,
And on the outside, too,
It’s not my fault.

Your truth is a lie
And my lie is a secret
That you’ve noticed
And claimed is truth.

I didn’t want this.

I had no choice.

Sincerely,
The Liar.
"Most folks are about as happy as they make up their minds to be."
-Abe Lincoln
"If only I had an enemy bigger than my apathy I could've won."
- " I Gave You All" by Mumford and Sons




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Hello,

Hi there Call! Anyways looks like I'll be reviewing your poem today...yay!!! So I think this had very well done descriptions. It had nice emotion and it made me realize how true somethings can be. One I like how you put "Sincerely, The Liar" at the end. It gives it a nice touch. I am honestly a tad bit confused on who the person is talking about or what. Maybe that's just my ignorance of being able to understand most poetry XD. Think they're talking about rumors or something like that....or secrets that someone found out and spilled out. Either way I truly enjoyed reading this. Send me a PM if you want any help....and I really liked these two parts.

I can see your eyes
Looking into mine
And I know what you think
I know what you see,
It can’t be ignored
It’s far too obvious.
But the ignorance is grating,
Your judgment unjust.
I never got a say
In what I’d become.

I have heard what people claim:
Freak,
Weird,
Strange.
It’s not my fault.
I’d stop if I could.
I want to, I do.


Well I hope I helped in some shape lol. Keep up the good work and Happy Writing. Buenas Suerte y Sayonara lols. May you receive many helpful reviews.
Soulkana<3
May the gentle moon take you into peaceful dreams. May the mighty sun brighten your new days.




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Nice! I thought it was great, however, at the beginning I'm really confused about what it's talking about. How is she a liar? You used good description and word flow but please use a clearer detail and explain what's going on. A secret message must be withhold behind poetry. Let poetry find you! :) I know in a lot of poetry, at first, it won't make sense but you get the idea of what is happening and idea (and this is what I believe) the idea in this poem is about someone being teased about who she is (if wrong please correct me!) but the problem is I'm not exactly sure if that's right. Thanks! Hope that helped :D
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The strongest people are not those who show their true strength in front of us but those who win battles we know nothing about.
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