Mothers Day

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Mothers Day
Is a wonderful day
and the best day of the year
we honor our mother
and some day
we will be honored
Mothers Day
mothers are special
so magnifacent
they have a day of their own
mothers are important
they deserve respect
so respect your mothers
for Mothers Day is all they get
Last edited by star12 on Thu May 26, 2011 2:53 pm, edited 3 times in total.




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This is well done and I really liked it because of how you worded it and all the points you pointed out. Such as its all they get is true because that's the only day we celebrate having moms XD. In the line "Mothers are special" there's a line that says "so special" i think you need to fix that since it repeats the same word which throws me off a bit. XD other than that I really liked it and I can't wait for more! Good luck and Happy Writing! Hope you get many helpful reviews and best of wishes. I can't find anything grammar or spelling that is wrong. Nor can I find things with punctuation since poetry really isn't something I can correct, I just enjoy reading them ^^. Well Hope I helped somewhat. Sayonara!!
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Oh my gosh! I should have written a poem for mothers day XD all I gave my mom was a power point that was actually a class assignment. Was this like your mom's gift? I like it, nice job! Hope she likes/liked it! :)
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i am tyrying to be helpgful, not mean diserve is spelled wrong you spell it like this: deserve.... but i like your poem...




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It really is a wonderful day! Only a few errors here and there:

star12 wrote:Mothers day
Is a wonderful day
and the best day of the year


"day" should be capitalized.

On another note, since you used "special" in a previous line, you should find another synonym to replace it.

star12 wrote:so respect your mothers
for mothers day is all they get


"mothers day" should be capitalized.

It was very lovely! If I were a mother, I would feel so great.
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