Becoming the Watcher

Star,
so far away.
You are ever so kind,
to stay.
So i sit
and i talk
and i gawk.
But I am so to wonder
that this star I gaze,
has always been to me…
the same.
But what would from the stars view
would it think of me?
ever changing--
every second,
every day.
Perhaps,
a child
of wild sorts.
Not yet fully aware
of his majesty's court.
But then,
the answer dawns.
Stars,
don't talk, or think, or see
all of these thoughts
are within me.

This is AMAZING! At first I was like 'Eh, this is alright. it's pretty nice.', but the ending makes the entire poem so strong! It's great. Of course my favorite part is the ending.

robertzimmerman wrote:Stars,
don't talk, or think, or see
all of these thoughts
are within me.

<3

Great job! Keep writing

xoxo,
Kiicoh.

The thought of the poem was nice specially the ending. Keep writting

helloo
I will be your reviewer today *nods*
I want to start off with saying that I like this poem! It is an original idea and I like what you did with it!
My criticism :

Star,
So far away.
You are ever so kind,
To stay.
So i sit 'i' should be I
And i talk 'i' should be I
And i gawk. 'i' should be I
But I am so to wonder
That this star I gaze,
Has always been to me…
The same.
But what would from the stars view
Would it think of me?
Ever changing--
Every second,
Every day.
Perhaps,
A child
Of wild sorts.
Not yet fully aware
Of his majesty's court.
But then,
The answer dawns.
Stars,
Don't talk, or think, or see
All of these thoughts
Are within me.

I love the end! It made this poem even better
my favorite part in this poem is:

But I am so to wonder
that this star I gaze,
has always been to me…
the same.

beautiful..
nice work!! I enjoyed reading this!
-qaralynn-