Mr. Drive-Me-Crazy

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Mr. Drive-Me-Crazy

Everybody knows a guy that makes you want to scream.

That one person you wish you could slap, yeah you know what I mean.

For me, that guy's name is Mr. "Why are you such a nerd??"

He's the only sheep that never shuts up out of the entire herd.

He greets me everyday with a victorious "HAH! I'm older than you!"

Every time I think his immaturity has expired, he goes to renew.

What really irks me is that exasperated look,

He gives me every time he sees me with a book.

His favorite thing to do is argue.

...A game in which he never surrenders, no matter what I say or do.

For him, if it's not violent and pointless, it's lame.

Which is probably why he so loves that stupid video game.

He seems to think my name is "Little girl"-even though I keep insisting otherwise.

When it comes to sports, he always tries and tries.

Then with his homework, he magically becomes lazy.

Meet the most annoying guy in the world; Mr. Drive-Me-Crazy.




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Oh my goodness I love that!
One thing; In this line ------>"...A game in which he never surrenders, no matter what I say or do."
I kind of got confused for a moment, because of the use of the ellipsis.
Other than that, I liked this piece a lot.
Keep going

Kirah
"All the soarings of my mind begin in my blood." - Rilke




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Thank you! But, I'm sorry, "ellipsis" means "dot dot dot"? Sorry I sound dumb.




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Yes it does :D
"All the soarings of my mind begin in my blood." - Rilke




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I loved this so much! Yes ellipsis means "Dot Dot Dot"( I`ve never heard of it either:) ) Thank you for joining and then writing this!
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Ahahaha, this poem was really good! It was both funny and well-written. I know a guy that is kind of similar to this... he just loves causing conflict and being annoying. It's in a harmless way, but I could still do without.
I liked the rhymning and I thought the rythmn was good. There was only one line that I felt it was a bit off:
He seems to think my name is "Little girl"-even though I keep insisting otherwise.
It's a little too long I think.

I also thought that the wording was a bit awkward here:
He's the only sheep that never shuts up out of the entire herd.


Another than those two minor suggestions, I really enjoyed this poem. Welcome to YWS, and keep up the great work! :D
Btw, I'm following you :)
I'd like to think I'm creative... instead of just plain weird ;D




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Looks great, BESS! (that stands for BrightEyedSoulSister, by the way)
Well, I have someone in my class who matches your description PERFECTLY, (Sebastian, ick. Euggghhh.) so I can really relate. Sorry that this was a pretty sucky review, I will try to get a REAL one to you sometime this week. If I don't, feel free to PM me and shout at me until I do it. MWAH! *blows kiss* Now for bedtime... *falls onto bed and promptly falls asleep*
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Hello there,

This is definitely something we can all relate to. There's always that one annoying person who seems to devote their whole life to ruining other peoples. I liked this poem because it was so simple and interesting. I can't find anything majorly wrong with this but I don't think the rhyming was as natural and subtle as it could have been, it seemed like the whole poem was working around the rhyming words so that they fit in. Overall though I did really liked this and I hope to see more of your writing around.

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