Is There Hope??

I can see nothing wrong with this other than the last line. You've used too many commas. here is what I think it should be:

Yet never able, always failing to my life reshape.

The general way you've worded it makes it awkward to figure out, but with a rhyming pattern that sometimes can't be helped. I struggle with it all the time when I write rhyming poems. I liked this poem a lot, I can definitely relate to the idea. Keep writing!

I can see nothing wrong with this other than the last line. You've used too many commas. here is what I think it should be:

Yet never able, always failing to my life reshape.

The general way you've worded it makes it awkward to figure out, but with a rhyming pattern that sometimes can't be helped. I struggle with it all the time when I write rhyming poems. I liked this poem a lot, I can definitely relate to the idea. Keep writing!

it's good, just change them into complete sentences, that will work much better.

Its good. probably changing the sentence structure a bit would be good.. otherwise, nicely done:)

It's really good. Just a few points:

Like a butterflies wingbeat

- It should be 'butterfly's' as you're using the possessive case not the plural form of the word.

hearing the roaring thunder

- Capital H.

Yet never able, always failing to, my life, reshape.

- This sounds a little awkward. Could it be worded differently? Something like 'Yet, my life, never able to reshape.' Or perhaps a different structure?
'Yet never able to,
Always failing to,
My life, reshape.'
I'm not sure though, it's difficult. I know how hard it is sometimes to try to fit a nice structure around what you want to say.

Overall though, I really liked it. Especially the first two lines. It's a lovely simile and very aurally appealing. Good job!

I really like this poem, though I agree with the others. The sentence structure is a bit strange. But I know how hard it is to write a rhyming poem. Maybe your later works will be better. I'll be reading again soon.