French Teacher from Hell

You psychopath!
I hate to feel your burning wrath.
Everyday like a bottomless cookie jar of spider filled cookies.
Whenever I disobey,
"Conduct mark" is what you say.
Conduct mark, schmonduct mark
I dont care.

You drive me to lose my hair.
You are a stress inducer,
Mind abuser,
Word confuser.

You are a cookie that not even cookie monster would eat because you are spider-filled.
Not chocolate, or jelly-filled,
Arachind infested.
Spiders have nested.

Eyes like a laser.
Voice like a razor.
Touch like a taser.

As heartful as the tin man.

I dont know why you cannot tell.
You are a french teacher from hell.

Hey, Teardrop here!

First of all, this coud have used punctuation and capitilization. Also, it could have been divided into stanzas, with ellaboration.

inimitablebeauty wrote:as heartful as the tin man

Would that be hurtful? I don't know. O.o

inimitablebeauty wrote:you are a cookie that not even cookie monster would eat because you are spider-filled

This is long, and really doesn't add anything to the poem except for length. I suggest changing it up a bit and shortening it.

Overall, it's amusing and I enjoyed reading it!

~Teardrop

Bahahaha! You defintley didn't hold back any emotion in this piece! I never took French, but some teachers are just that way. I like how you rhymed your lines and still managed to make it flow! Great Job!

Wow! This is a very amusing poem and manages to get its point across without being too, too harsh. What you really need is capitalization and better punctuation, but other than that it is well written for what you are trying to say. My favorite line is...

as heartful as the tin man

I love the allusion to the Wizard of Oz saying how heartless she is. A very amusing poem, indeed.

Hi! I liked this piece a lot, it was really funny, and I could easily see your feelings of anger and emotion in this. The similies and metaphors were really creative. I liked this part the best:
"i dont care
you drive me to lose my hair
you are a stress inducer,
mind abuser,
word confuser"
The only thing you need to work on is more punctuation, the poem would flow more and give the readers more pause and ability to think about the poem. So thank you so much for posting I really enjoyed this piece, I thought it was creative, funny and flowed nicely! Thanks for posting!
Peace,
Snickerdooly

Hi, It was very funny and enjoyable!! Really good read. Great flow and the rhyme was good too... But the best part was, I totally understood it!! it so irritating when teachers are being irritating!! I totally agree with you!! And one more thing: try to get your teacher to read it... it will be fun.. i'm gonna do that!!:D

i literally laughed cause you remind me of those teacher back in my year schools, Oh god such long time...

any way it was amusing and lovely, i like it. you can go throw it again you may find words could be replaces too, as you wrote on heavy emotion mood!!
GOOD JOB, keep UP

teardrop, i get what your saying and i adding punctuation and capitalization and divided it into stanzas thanks:)
-<3- inimitablebeauty

LOL This poem made me laugh. I defintley think Ive had a few teachers from hell and I know how you feel. Lol emotion was defintley there and I thought the poem was very creative. I liked it but Everyday like a bottomless cookie jar of spider filled cookies? You are a cookie that not even cookie monster would eat because you are spider-filled? lml Im not sure what you mean. Other than that funny poem and I enjoyed it.