Intertwined

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Let's burn back the stars
And drift into the night sky
All regret aside
A nexus of hope
A refuge, a haven in each other's breath
Tendrils of nostalgia
Waves of recollection
If all the world's a stage...then everything is a lie, an act, a work of tangible genius.




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Haha this is beautiful and simple. Yet this is most brilliant and wonderful. I hope to read more of your works later. I can not find any spelling errors or any corrections. All I say would try and lengthen it to give it more life but that is a suggestion that you do not have to follow. Good luck and Keep up the good work. Happy Writing!!!!
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May the gentle moon take you into peaceful dreams. May the mighty sun brighten your new days.




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I love short poems.
Your poem is short.

conclusion: I love your poem.

keep writing!
Sometimes B sharp,
Never B flat,
Always B natural.

I love writing songs and listening to music and books and daydreaming and coffee at five in the morning.




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It might have been a little too short; I was just getting into it and then it was done. But that's just my opinion. It's a really really really good poem, it's the type that you reread over and over again and never gets boring. The poem is extremely original.
When I was young, I admired clever people. Now that I am old, I admire kind people.
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] it's too short but I love it. I also felt like I wish this could be longer, because I want more of this! :D sooo great!!

] love the line "Let's burn back the stars, and drift into the night sky" whoa..!
You'll know my story,
But you'll never know my name,
Neither the story of my life.. just yet.


- WRITER,MAJOR IN ROMANCE




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I cannot express to you how much I love the simplicity and language used in this poem. It really expresses so much in so little lines. I cannot find any error in it, but please don't expand on it and don't add any grammar - I love it just the way it is(:
I look foward to reading more poems like these. Happy writing!
"Let other pens dwell on guilt and misery!" - Jane Austen




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For all of those that are wanting more? GOOD. I like writing with the feel of the Romantics: a feeling of yearning and longing. My goal is to transmit that yearning and longing into my readers. In my opinion, just like a good book, a good poem will stick with you and leave you wanting more. :) I might try to write another one in the same style and make it a bit longer for those of you that like long poems. I'll save my lecture on how I think the very nature of poems is to say as much in as little, but meh, everyone's not me. :D




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Personally, I love this poem the way it is. But it's so good that I want more. That seems a bit confusing. But basically, I would love it longer or the same length. The simplicity of it really draws my attention. That's mainly why I like it. The sense of desire that's within it--I can't even describe, it's amazing. Very very original. I look foward to reading more of your work. Please, keep writing.

-Lexi :)




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It's quite beautiful and short. I liked it all, and I don't want to write too much but I liked it a lot! (:
Writing is where I can get away...



Stories don't end because you stopped paying attention.
— SJ Whitby