Let's burn back the stars And drift into the night sky All regret aside A nexus of hope A refuge, a haven in each other's breath Tendrils of nostalgia Waves of recollection
If all the world's a stage...then everything is a lie, an act, a work of tangible genius.
Haha this is beautiful and simple. Yet this is most brilliant and wonderful. I hope to read more of your works later. I can not find any spelling errors or any corrections. All I say would try and lengthen it to give it more life but that is a suggestion that you do not have to follow. Good luck and Keep up the good work. Happy Writing!!!! Soulkana<3
May the gentle moon take you into peaceful dreams. May the mighty sun brighten your new days.
It might have been a little too short; I was just getting into it and then it was done. But that's just my opinion. It's a really really really good poem, it's the type that you reread over and over again and never gets boring. The poem is extremely original.
When I was young, I admired clever people. Now that I am old, I admire kind people. -Abraham Joshua Heschel
I cannot express to you how much I love the simplicity and language used in this poem. It really expresses so much in so little lines. I cannot find any error in it, but please don't expand on it and don't add any grammar - I love it just the way it is(: I look foward to reading more poems like these. Happy writing!
"Let other pens dwell on guilt and misery!" - Jane Austen
For all of those that are wanting more? GOOD. I like writing with the feel of the Romantics: a feeling of yearning and longing. My goal is to transmit that yearning and longing into my readers. In my opinion, just like a good book, a good poem will stick with you and leave you wanting more. I might try to write another one in the same style and make it a bit longer for those of you that like long poems. I'll save my lecture on how I think the very nature of poems is to say as much in as little, but meh, everyone's not me.
Personally, I love this poem the way it is. But it's so good that I want more. That seems a bit confusing. But basically, I would love it longer or the same length. The simplicity of it really draws my attention. That's mainly why I like it. The sense of desire that's within it--I can't even describe, it's amazing. Very very original. I look foward to reading more of your work. Please, keep writing.