I Tread On Dangerous Ground

I Tread On Dangerous Ground


I tread on dangerous ground.
Bombs explode around me.
They do not make a sound.
I speak the truth.
I speak my pain.
I would go to the ends of the world my dear,
To drive your mind insane.

Love is one truth
I will never know.
A soul is a part of me
I will never show.

Call me evil. Hold a grudge
Try to kill me, but dare not misjudge.
I was once a boy but I was damaged.
My heart torn out, my brain was savaged.

Now I tread a dangerous ground.
Searching for a love I never found.

Very nice.

Try not to use so many periods--I think dashes and commas would better serve your purpose. For instance:

I tread on dangerous ground--
Bombs explode around me,
They do not make a sound.

Like that.

Also,
Is sad. I sorry. (Don'tcha love my fantastical grammar skills right now.)

I love it! Its dramatic and exciting and it rhymes! Very sophisticated i can't find a problem with it so well done!

This is beautiful! Careful not to rhyme at the expense of expressing the way you truly feel.