The Unexpected

"So, I do expect you to tell me where you were last night." I sat across the small table and stared at my cerial.
"I'm sorry, I didn't do anything!" I shouted back at my mother. She layed a comforting hand on me signaling all she wanted was the details. "Rylee told me there was a great restrant down this alley," I began the thought of last night's action scared me half to death. "Once we were at the back of the alley he pushed me to the ground." Tears flowed quickly down my rosie cheeks.
"I'm sorry, I shouldn't have asked." She was quiet. "Your father contacted the police in the mean time," Mom hesitated, afraid of my reaction the the stick in her hand. "A fifteen-year-old like yourself shouldn't have to go through this but," Gently I took the pregnacy tester from her understanding it was the least I could do.
Slowly I shut the door behind me in the bathroom, afraid of the results of this horrifying stick. I leaned over the toliet and let the urin flow out onto the plastic bar. When I was done I knew just a few minutes of worry would result in the answer of the dreaded question. I waited, hoped, worried, and remembered.
Mom rushed in the door as my scream wandered into the hall. I lie on the floor, only thinking of the color of the stick, Green. Green ment positive. "Come-on." Mom pulled me up off the tile floor and dragged me out the door. My feet felt like sand bags as she pulled me into her silver SUV. Silently mom drove down the long path to the doctor's office but I could see the worry in her eyes. She was in such a hurry she drove right through a red light. For a moment I caught all my thoughts, only concerned that a car would hit us. Mom zoomed out of the intersection with no new marks on the car. Now we were very close to the doctor's.
Suddenly the car screeched to a stop directly in front of the doctor's entrance. Mom dove out of the car in a flash of light. She looked like Edward the way she raced around the vehical to get me out and into the building.
"I'm sorry." The doctor explained.
"Can't you do something!?" Mom screamed.
"We're just going to have to wait and see, I'm sorry." The doctor showed us to the door and left to see another patient.
"We can always do an abortion." Mom suggested, she knew abortion was wrong, but like the fifteen-year-old I was, she knew I couldn't raise a child.
"No," I was determend to take whatever God threw at me.
"What?!" Mom was surpirized, "I'm not gonna take care of it!"
"I'm not killing a life.'' She looked at me with the tinniest bit of madness but mostly understanding in her eyes. "I'm not killing a life." I repeted looking back.

Ello MandaPanda! :D I am here to review your piece. Now here are some pointers on how my reviews work: Spelling/grammar errors will be in red, the original in italics. Comments/questions will be in blue, the original in bold. And things I liked in general in green! :3 So let's get started. I will pick out the sentences in need of a fix, but they will go in order of the story so you can find them more easily.

I sat across the small table and stared at my cerial cereal.

"I'm sorry, I didn't do anything!" I shouted back at my mother.<--Was her mother yelling? You didn't say

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She layed laid a comforting hand on me comma signaling all she wanted was the details.

"Rylee told me there was a great restrant restaurant down this alley," I began comma the thought of last night's action scared me half to death.

Tears flowed quickly down my rosie rosy cheeks.

Mom hesitated, afraid of my reaction the the stick in her hand.<--You missed some words here and repeated 'the'.

Gently I took the pregnacy tester from her comma understanding it was the least I could do.

I leaned over the toliet toilet and let the urin urine flow out onto the plastic bar.

Green ment meant positive.

Mom dove out of the car in a flash of light.<--Color would be better then light, I believe.

She looked like Edward <--If this is a character from Twilight, you should reference that the way she raced around the vehical vehicle to get me out and into the building.

"I'm sorry." The doctor explained. <---Was there a pause from the car to the doctor examination?

"What?!" Mom was surpirized surprised, "I'm not gonna take care of it!"

I repeted repeated looking back.

There were many mistakes in the story, but it was mostly doing fine. Make sure to reread your piece before submitting so you catch most of them yourself. There is still much work with description, character thought, and other major aspects of writing, but you'll get there. :] Also, on another thought, you stated that she was raped a day before. For a pregnancy test, it takes about two weeks for one to come out positive. Some can be a little earlier, but only by a few days. Not the day after conceiving. So I would suggest going over that part and making some things happen in between the rape and the test. Good luck on the rest of your story and hoped I helped! :]