Jezebel

Finally got another poem put together. Critique appreciated.

Wow, very interesting; I didn't understand one word; but maybe that's what you're going for; probably what you're going for. Anyway, can't really review because I have no idea what I'm reviewing, I can just say that it definitely made me think.
Did she die and now they're thinking about her? That's the only thing I can guess.

I might lay off on the experimentation a bit; to 99% of people I'm sure this just seems like pure gibberish.

I liked it, but I'm just too stupid to understand.

Bravo; I think?

Confusing, I honestly didn't understand. Maybe I wasn't supposed to, but what I suggest is getting rid of some of the fancy stuff that went along with it, people get tired by that stuff and don't want to read it. If you like it good for you and you shouldn't give that up, but dumb it down a bit for the rest of us and keep the fancy copy for yourself. Also, you're more likely to get reviews if you actually put it on YWS, since a lot of people aren't going to want to download something just to give someone a review. Friends might, but the average Joe just perusing the forum is gonna click on this and immediately click away.

Hmm. Get's me realizing that most everything I write, I don't even understand. I give it up to the reader. I am assuming this is something of the same type. It is almost like the poem I wrote, that peril of the night. This is extremely interesting, but, if you asked me what I remembered reading from this poem, I could only tell you that I could not understand anything about it. It made a very interesting form and had a thought provoking style. Creative, but difficult to compute.

-jc