me, the robot

how am i supposed to feel
what am i supposed to do
how am i supposed to act

is there a right answer

can someone please
give me
an answer
thats all i need

a sign
some hope
relief
dreams

cause right now
i feel dead inside
like a robot
following the commands of its owner

sure mom ill empty the dishwasher
sure teacher ill hand in my homework
sure director ill memorize my lines

i do my routine
day after day
but i dont feel a thing

am i supposed to feel
good?
am i supposed to feel
love?
i dont
what does it feel like?

maybe one day he'll tell me
maybe one day he'll care
but until then
i go on as a robot
lifeless, and empty.

I guess we all feel that way sometimes; like we're on a hamster wheel. I like the simple short sentences they are very powerful. Though I don't really see structure, that's fine, but maybe you should use a really RIGID structure to parallel the way all this stuff makes you feel. No real review, just an idea, I don't really see anything glaringly wrong with this, just maybe a bit generic, WE ALL HAVE THESE FEELINGS---

now use something more personal or something more unique to clearly difine how YOU feel.

Bon!

This was an interesting idea, and this was written pretty well, but like the first reviewer pointed out it lacked rhythm or structure. Even though it's free-verse, there needs to be that common thread that ties it all together, and I kind of felt like it was lacking that. It was a good poem, but I think it was missing that real backbone.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver

Hello there. I'm Ehte, here for the review.
I can totally agree with the reviewers from above. There is no structure to it. Well, it's free verse so I didn't hope a rhythm but it did not excite me while reading it. I could not feel what you were trying to convey through your poem. And you should start emphasizing on punctuation marks because they have a major role to play in a poem. I have some nitpicks.

how am i supposed to feel How am I supposed to feel?
what am i supposed to do What am I supposed to do?
how am i supposed to act How am I supposed to act?

is there a right answer Is there a right answer to this?

can someone please
give me
an answer
thats all i need That’s all I need.

[a sign
some hope
relief
dreams] This whole stanza can be summed up to be one single line. Work on this.

cause right now
I feel dead inside
like a robot
following the commands of its owner Following commands, of its owner.

sure mom ill empty the dishwasher Sure mom, I’ll empty the dishwasher.
sure teacher ill hand in my homework Sure teacher, I’ll hand in my homework.
sure director ill memorize my lines Sure director, I’ll memorize my lines.

I do my routine
day after day
but i dont feel a thing But I don’t feel a thing.

am i supposed to feel Am I supposed to feel
good?
am i supposed to feel Am I supposed to feel
love?
i dont I don’t know
what does it feel like?

maybe one day he'll tell me
maybe one day he'll care
but until then
I go on as a robot
lifeless, and empty. empty isn't the perfect word to use here.

I hope this helps you.

I thought the meaning to this was really great, but it felt a little broken. Some of the lines were really short, others were longer. I think you should choose one or the other. Also, be sure to capitalize the beginning of each thought, and make sure your punctuation is...clear (I'm not sure how to put it)...

How am i supposed to feel?
What am i supposed to do?
How am i supposed to act?

Is there a right answer?

Can someone please
give me
an answer?
That's all i need-

a sign
some hope
relief
dreams,
You could put commas at the end of each line there, but it's okay if you don't, as long as you have the last one.

cause right now,
i feel dead inside-
like a robot
following the commands of its owner. or - or something.

Sure mom ill empty the dishwasher.
Sure teacher ill hand in my homework.
Sure director ill memorize my lines.

I do my routine
day after day,
but i dont feel a thing.

Am i supposed to feel
good?
Am i supposed to feel
love?
I don't
What does it feel like?

Maybe one day he'll tell me.
Maybe one day he'll care.
But until then,
I go on as a robot-
lifeless, and empty.


Now I understand this is a lot of punctuation for a poem, and i wouldn't expect you to put so much in, but I think some of it could make this a bit better. Also, in the last stanza, make it more clear who "he" is. If you're talking about God, capitalize it. Maybe it's easy to understand and I'm just missing it for some reason, but still.

Hope I helped...at least a bit...

I really liked this poem, but, again, as several comments before me stated, it lacked a structure, punctuation, and capitalization. I'm not saying you HAVE to have a structure and punctuation (because it's free verse; you can do whatever you want), but it might be beneficial for you to add a bit of that. Also, it might also be worthwhile for you to add punctuation. This might just be me, but whenever I see somebody not capitalizing and "I", it just bugs me.
Great work overall; this poem has potential; keep writing!!!