Like the Wind

Like The Wind

If at any moment, you feel lost,
I'm there to be your guide.
If at any second, you feel the need to cry,
I'm there to be your shoulder.
If at any moment you have a dark cloud looming above you,
I'm there to shine like the sun, and stop the rain.

For whatever reason it may be,
I shall be what you need.
But in that moment where you need nothing,
I'm exactly that; nothing.
I become like the wind,
Always there, never seen.

To not take you by surprise,
I shall warn you now.
The wind goes everywhere, and is nowhere.
Everchanging, and never still.
One morning you'll awake,
Waiting for the wind that will never come.
One day you'll see,
Everything you had, everything you needed,
All that meant anything,
Was simply me.

Wow! great poem.. love every bit of it.

If at any moment you have a dark cloud looming above you,

I think "looming overhead" would flow better rhythm-wise.

But in that moment where you need nothing,

I think the ideas and poem as a whole flow better without the "but". Filler words like "but" can really detract from a poem because, due to how short it is, each word counts for a lo, and having unnecessary filler dilutes the power of the other words in your poem.

To not take you by surprise,
I shall warn you now.

I'm not sure why these lines are inverted. They read awkwardly because of the inversion.

Ever-changing, and never still.

Be careful with your spelling. Also, "and" could be considered a filler word because you can remove it, and the thought still makes sense. I also think it sounds better without the "and".

One morning you'll awaken,
Waiting for the wind that never comes,
And one day you will see,
Everything you had, everything you needed,

The flow in these lines was a bit rocky. My suggestions are in blue. I also suggest changing both "everything"s to "all". It not only flows better, but it ties in repetition-wise to the next line "All that meant anything".

Overall though, the flow in this was decent. It didn't have much imagery, but I liked how you had the narrator self-characterize themselves as being like the wind.

helloo!
I want to begin with saying that I absolutely love this poem. It's original which makes it even better XD
I don't have any criticism for you really..I just loved how you used the wind to describe yourself

My favorite part:

One day you'll see,
Everything you had, everything you needed,
All that meant anything,
Was simply me.

nice write!!
-qaralynn-