Haunting Darkness

In the cold dark forest

I lay down to rest

Feeling the darkness settle

In the light that meddles

Looking up I see the red eyes

That looked like crimson skies

And the love he gives so freely

Unlike the word who gives out pain so cruelly

In the forest

I look into emerald eyes

Like emerald ice

Whose pale face

Betrays the Darkness around her

As I watch her smile

That lights up my world

Unlike the pain that darkens

Unlike the word who gives out pain so cruelly

I had to slow down reading the poem to read this line. It seemed kind of long and took the flow out of the poem.

Other than that, I don't see any grammar errors. Maybe someone else will point those out if there are any. I love the imagery. You are very good at describing what is there and I look forward to seeing more of your work.

Bravo! You really know how to capture a feeling and/or image.

Keep it up.

Thanks for the reviews guys ^^ glad you liked it