Same Old Story

You all telling me I changed
Well I say what-the-hell?
Im tired of being ranged
In your claustrophobic cell

I am who I am
Too bad you couldn't see that
Really I ain't no sham
And that for one is a fact

I'm tired of being told
That I'm a wannabe
'Cause this lie is getting old
Yeah I know what's true and not, you see

I guess I trusted you too fast
Thought I could one day be myself
And now when the time came atlast
You pushing me away, saying I'm not my old self

What did you ever know about me?
Only what I let out
And now you won't let me be
Man i just wanna shout

CAN'T YOU SEE
IT'S ME, YES ME
PLEASE JUST LET ME BE
JUST SET ME FREE
'CAUSE IT'S STILL THE SAME ME

You gotta stick this in your head
I never changed
So all what you said
It's a lie that used to make me cringe

But now I think I don't care
You may try to drown me in this bullshit
But I've decided to no more wear
That mask you force upon me; i'll be me, that's IT !

This could be a very cool song! you did a great job on this and i love the rhyming. Very nice. Unfortunately, I don't have any negative comments for you to improve.

Seems a bit forced to me--I guess it's the rhythm or something.

Other than that, I like it--very easy to identify with, especially

I guess I trusted you too fast
Thought I could one day be myself

Oh yeah, the I on the last line should be capitalized.

This has a lot of emotion and power in the word choice!

I'm tired of being ranged
In your claustrophobic cell

Love this line!

Really it? ain't no shame
And that for one is a fact

Aside from those errors, I loved it! For the most part, it flowed nicely, others' it felt a little forced.
I can definitely see where you're coming from. Brilliant!

I agree with the others that some parts sounds forced. I think that have a lot to do with the rhyming. I know you want to rhyme, but you shouldn't make the lines seems to forced, make it come naturally. Now to do that, you can play with the words around a bit. Rearrange the order of the words. You'd be surprised how much they can change.

Also, this poem seems more of a rant than anything. Which is fine. But to do a rant well, you need to make it powerful, concise and to the point. Now, your poem is lacking a bit of power. I think that may have something to do with it's length and choice or words.

With the length, to write a poem that long isn't really against anything. It's just that it's a bit bland if you keep it on the same topic. Can I suggest you to add a bit more to it instead of: I am who I am, deal with it. I think you need to write about other things, say maybe, how you acted and how you really want to act. Vary it, keep it interesting.

And with your choice of words, it's a bit dull and simple, not that that's a problem. But to make a really powerful rant, the words need to be concise and they need to have effect upon the people reading it. I think that you need to think about your choice of words a bit more carefully, instead of just writing out any old thing.

Now another thing, can I suggest you do more of showing and not telling. Show us, don't tell us. It keeps things interesting.

Hope this helps! It wasn't too harsh was it?