Hard Love

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As I watch you go
My heart keeps screaming 'NO!'
Though I surely do know
That the only thing I was familiar with,
Was hard love

24 hours a day
Every second it crossed my way
And brought tears to my eyes
So dull and grey
'Cause I only knew hard love.

I remember your mischeivous smile
That you wore while,
Doing something so vile
But now all these memories
Left nothing but hard love

When my heart was always crying
'Cause you seemed to be disappearing
And seemed to be very much laughing
I looked on an recieved a blow caused by hard love

But I loved you for your laughter
That rang so well
And I loved you for the way
You made my heart swell
And broke my defences, my shell
Though now all I can hear is
The rythmic beat of hard love

And I knew that one day you'd leave
After all the happiness you'd weave
'Cause I loved you way too much
And now here I heave
'Cause you left me in a tangled mess of hard love

So i'm writing you this letter
To say that I knew you for the better
And though you left brusquely
I understand it was your wandering nature
But still I'm grateful; though it was hard love

And I'm telling you I love you
Though you're far away
I know you couldn't stay
But I love you in my own way
And i know I'm not regretting
'Cause this is hard love
Yes it's hard love though it really pains
'Cause it's real,yeah it's hard love all the same
For it's the onlything that can be named
'Etenal Nostalgie'
Yes it's HARD LOVE !




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This had an interesting feel to it, like she's heartbroken but she saw it coming so isn't surprised. She's accepted that he's gone. ♥d it. Did you intend it to be a song or something?

I looked on an recieved a blow caused by hard love

Correction: "and received". I before E except after C!
Shakespearian tongue-twister:

To sit in solemn silence
In a dark, dank dock
In a pestilential prison
With a lifelong lock;
Awaiting the sensation
Of a short, sharp shock
Of a cheap, chippy chopper
On a big black block.




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This interesting. It sounds like a song. It should be a song. But I liked it. I feel like it should have better flow. It was sorta choppy and felt like it stopped at unnecessary places but overall i liked it.
~Life has a song for every moment in life. It is just the matter of finding the right one.~




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Haha noooooo it wasnt meant to be a song...just a poem :) I just fail in song writing -__- ..And thanks for the critics...i'll try to correct myself next time ! :)



Sea and Sky- both blue. Once, in proposal, Sea turned red. Sky's father- Sun forbade so she wept as rain, uniting the lovers in defiance.
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