The last of the Krornard

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Freaky friday,
Almost slightly,
Never empty
Lovely days

Something's coming
Almost running,
'Bout to see it
Through the haze

Mind is clearing
As it's nearing,
Squint to see it
As it appears

Nostrels flaring
Green eyes glaring,
It seems exausted,
Full of fears

Tepping forwards
And looping backwards
Animal goes
Have to follow

I stumble onwards
To follow the Krornard
Feeling empty
Now it's mellow

Now I'm lost
Knowing I must
Follow that trail
Wherever it goes

Hypnotised
By those eyes
The Krornard
I persue

Freaky friday
Almost slightly
Never ending
Persue of Krornard

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The last of the Krornard was last sighted in the desert, to the notth of the Sahara. It has a spiked hunch-back and four fast legs, one of them said to have been injured. In 1896, when the last of the Krornard's herds was killed off and sold for: clothes, food, entertainment, bull fighting, freak shows, etc. Only one had escaped.
After a year of nonexistance, the last of the Krornard was said to have kidnapped a small girl at the age of 14. Jane Shawlers was last seen on the 15th of July, weeks before her 15th birthday, to be wondering off into the thick evening mist. Her parents seem to be heart-broken as Jane was their only child.
If anyone sights the girl or beast, please call: 5455247 (on the scream line FPN news). Help Jane find her way home.




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This looks like it may be part of a story?

I noticed a few typos.

Nostrels flaring


Should be "Nostrils."

It seems exausted,


Should be "exhausted."

Tepping forwards


Should be "Stepping."

I persue


Should be "pursue."

Persue of Krornard


Should be "Pursuit.

Freaky friday,
Almost slightly,
Never empty
Lovely days

Something's coming
Almost running,
'Bout to see it
Through the haze

Mind is clearing
As it's nearing,
Squint to see it
As it appears

Nostrels flaring
Green eyes glaring,
It seems exausted,
Full of fears


I like the flow of the poem up to this point. After this though, it seems like it is off time. I'm not sure I have the right vocabulary to describe it; it's just the sense I got from reading it.

I hope this helps.
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yes it does, thanks. It does get a bit off beat further in... I'll think about what changes i can do to improve ;) thanx for the correction




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Good work! It was very creative!
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