Division by Hearts

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That it is, and it is what it is
is what makes that what is
little more than cause for headaches,
for one does not simply describe love,
nor evaluate it, nor place a vector
cross my heartstrings and call it
imaginary,
for I know no formula. I know no axes
or bounds of its might, no sum of its functions,
just sounds in the night, for want
of no headaches, no heartbreaks,
to toss regret on a tangent, and sign it a wave.
To break free of my prison, to make my escape,
cos(I'm trapped in my mind with nowhere to run)
cos(it seems I'm always the negative one)
For my ex is completely at odds, out of sync, if you will.
We both try to speak, and the voices are nil,
for all my sins, this is the path I will run
to the end ad. infinitum.

In conclusion, there is a simple statement I can make
about us two, and I only hope the divining fates
let you see that 2 is always <3

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It's been a long time. How have you been, YWSers?
There will come a time you'll see, with no more tears
and love will not break your heart, but dismiss your fears.
Get over your hill and see what you find there
with grace in your heart and flowers in your hair.
~Mumford and Sons


My name is ElderMimmi.




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Hi there.

I really liked this.

Your flow was very giid, as was your use of language. It was more odd and interesting than many other love poems you see floating around.

The one thing I would work on more is your imagery. I think making this poem ore descriptive would benefit this a lot.

Besides that, good job.
I can't explain myself, I'm afraid, Sir, because I'm not myself you see.

Alice in Wonderland




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Wow, this is an awesome poem. As said before, this is really different from your usual love poems. I really like this, please keep writing more.
Shyblueishflower




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Interesting Poem. maybe the most amazing one I've read. :)



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