The last Friendship Call

I wrote this whilst going through some hard times . . . and there may be some huge mistakes, but hope you like it

I'll never forget how much I loved you
I'll never forget how much I cared
I'll never forget how special I felt
Whenever I saw that you were there

You're the kindest person I've ever met
With an inocent soul, shining bright
Tender and calm, forever honest
Shining on throughout the night

But I guess my feelings decieved me
Playing with me to the brink and off
My feelings of past and cast hope
Called my bluff and sauntered off

Now I'm left and abandoned to the world
With an old enemy of greif and regret,
Neglect and denial - You cannot tell me
That I have no reason to fret

When you said goodbye, I could barley breath
It always got caught in the throat
And now you're gone and how empty i feel
If your love was money, I'd be broke

I'n not asking for your forgivness
For what I did was unthinkable
That's why I sent this Poem -
The last friendship Call

I love your poem, but i think you could definitely use some imagery to make it more emotional. Then we'll talk XD. But your technique is very good, in my opinion. Keep writing!

your poem is fantastic i love it!
there are a couple of parts that don’t flow and nicely as the rest but other than that is was great
i personally like the first 4 lines best
keep up the good work :]

thanks guys! I did try and make it flow better but found it was quite dificult haha :$ thanx for the comments!

Wow!!!! You don't know how much I can relate to this!!! I enjoyed reading this very much. Although, I do agree with the other comments, I think the poem could have used more details, more emotions, and it could have been a bit longer.
I noticed that in the third stanza, you used "off" twice. Maybe you can think of another word to replace "off", since it comes at the end of both lines. I think that, you could have added some commas, and periods. For instance in the first stanza....
I'll never forget how much I loved you;
I'll never forget how much I cared.
I'll never forget how special I felt
Whenever I saw that you were there.


My favorite lines are:
I'll never forget how special I felt
Whenever I saw that you were there.

Please keep writing, and expressing your emotions!