Barriers

I felt like screwing around with refrain and repetions:
(In some parts, you could say that there is a little rhyme, but that is stretching your imagination , It is not there on purpose.)

Spoiler

The otter swims because it can.
The birds flies to where it likes.
The fish swims in all directions.
No barriers to their lives.
They aren’t trapped like you and me.
They don’t hold back like you and me.
They will explore unlike -- you and me.
Our barriers in our lives.
I forget we have imaginations.
I forget we like to explore the world.
I forget we had originality.
These barriers we’ve created.

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hey... I saw it and title seemed interesting so I decided to see... but made up my mind to review after I read it because its something very true... There is a thing of honesty and reality in it... Indeed we have barriers that stop us... but no barriers could have probably stopped me from reviewing your piece... Good job...

true, we all have barriers. i kinda disagree with your overall theme, but brilliant job anyways! i would only take out the ---

I was generally surprised.
At first, starting out, when I was reading the poem, I was kind of iffy. I was worried about where it was going.
But then, when you got to the part about "you and me", I really like it. Although that isn't grammatically correct, but oh well, screw grammar, this is poetry! Haha.
I got shivers reading this. It was really pretty. Nice imagery, nice lead it, although I was worried, but after finishing the poem I really like it. I will be reading this one again, definitely.

I like the message a lot, I really do. It wasn't exactly what I thought someone would you to portray that, but it was kind of refreshing because of that.

WritersUnleashed wrote:
The otter swim's because it can. The otter swim's
The birds flies to where it likes. Wouldn't it be "the bird" singular, if you're talking about one. And if not, it would be "The birds fly to where they like."
The fish swim's in all directions.
No barriers to their lives.
They aren’t trapped like you and me.
They don’t hold back like you and me.
They will explore unlike -- you and me. Hmm, the "unlike" threw me off. It broke the flow to me. "They will explore; not you and me" or "they will explore but not you and me.
Our barriers in our lives.
I forget we have imaginations.
I forget we like to explore the world.
I forget we had originality.
These barriers we’ve created.This last bit was my favorite.