Love

Standing right next to you,
realizing who you are.
You love me and I love you too,
even though we are very far.
I give you my heart,
I know that is how love is.
that is how it would start,
probably some memories we wouldn't miss.

Nothing else I would ask,
You can say the true words,
It's a very easy task,
For every human in the world.
yeah I will do it too,
That is life of course in this earth.
Probably it would take days for us two,
That we would never have our feelings hurt.

Wonderful and lovely the feeling it seems,
You shouldn't be speechless either way.
Its love it always had been,
in all of the 365 days.
Everyday, year and life,
I know its hard but its true.
love appears almost like every time,
Its better than anything else that it will do....

First off, well done! I like this poem because it is about love, but it's also very optimistic. Let me get the constructive criticism out of the way, but just remember I don't mean to sound harsh or anything

Standing right next to you,
realizing who you are.
You love me and I love you too,
even though we are very far.
I give you my heart,
I know that is how love is. Maybe to make it flow a bit better, change that is to that's
That is how it would start,
Probably some memories we wouldn't miss.

Nothing else I would ask,
You can say the true words,
It's a very easy task,
For every human in the world.
Yeah I will do it too,
That is life of course in this earth.
Probably it would take days for us two,
That we would never have our feelings hurt.

Wonderful and lovely the feeling it seems,
You shouldn't be speechless either way.
Its love it always had been,
In all of the 365 days.
Everyday, year and life,
I know its hard but its true.
Love appears almost like every time,
Its better than anything else that it will do....


So there are just some little corrections there. One other thing, I think you need to make the poem's meaning a bit more clear? I get that it was about you and your love, but after that I got a bit lost. So maybe just outline the plot of the poem a bit more, and it's a great poem!

oh thanks. I will try my best. :]
Its very helpful. Thanks

hey... I just read your poem i will say one thing... You made mistakes at a couple of places as the reviewer before me has pointed out... But I still LOVED it!!! It is on love which I cannot resist and so deep and real that went in... a very well written I would say... Good job:)