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Been sitting in this room
Trying to think of the right words to say.
Truth is,
I may not be perfect
Or know all the right things to say,
But I do know one thing:
My heart will always
Be true to you,
Nobody could ever
Take your place in my heart.
I know it's too late to change your mind,
But I can't live on this earth knowing that
You're a million miles away
From me.
Please don't let me
Lose you again.
Last edited by rememberdecember on Tue Mar 29, 2011 2:23 pm, edited 3 times in total.




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The "again" at the end of the poem got cut off or you just... accidentally skipped the "n" at the end?
But other than that it's very lovely. Sad. But lovely :)
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I like your imagery. It's a nice poem and gave me a warm feeling. One thing though. Please use proper punctuation in your sentences. Someone told me, once, that a poem is nothing but a bunch of sentences put together. The structure makes it different from prose, but it still has sentences in it! :D Otherwise, I like it. Just remember to go back and make sure to fix your punctuation and to fix this
Lose you agai]
if it isn't deliberate. Keep writing! :)
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Been sitting in this room
Trying to think of the right words to say.
Truth is,
I may not be perfect
Or know all the right things to say,
But I do know one thing:
My heart will always
Be true to you,
Nobody could ever
Replace your spot in my heart. -- "take your place in my heart" perhaps would sound better
I know it's too late to change your mind,
But I can't live on this earth knowing that
You're a million miles away
From me.
Please don't let me lose you again,
Lose you again.


Simple poem, but nonetheless enjoyable. I added some punctuation marks wheere needed. Apart from that, good job!
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Hello there.
It was a good piece of poetry and i liked it too but it had no flow. And please do add some punctuations to your poem. It would be more better along with punctuations. Some nitpicks.

Been sitting in this room
Trying to think of the right words to say Trying to think, the right words to say
Truth is,
I may not be perfect
Or know all the right things to say You already said this thing before. That line above quite meant the same thing.
But I do know one thing
My heart will always
Be true to you
Nobody could ever
Replace your spot in my heart
I know it's too late to change your mind
But I can't live on this earth knowing that
You're a million miles away
From me
Please don't let me lose you again
Lose you again But this last line was totally unnecessary.


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