Connotations

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I know that his makes absolutely no sense. It's sort of supposed to just be saying ways to set dark scenes, and different opportunities that could help with that. Yeah I don't know.


The blackest moment.
That broken heart.
Those hot tears
And raging anger.

The darkest night.
The deepest love.
Beyond ignorance;
The fiercest passion.

Through Sleepy Hallow
And into Dreamland.
High above the town;
Far below the sea.

Desolation.
Fidelity.
Animosity.
Express yourself.

Midnight poems.
Dark feelings.
Depression.
Connotations.
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Hi! I really liked this poem, particularly because I'm into the macabre-y stuff myself, but I think you need to work on your fluidity, as it seems a bit jerky and awkward - or was that the intention?
I really liked this stanza:
LukanRinta wrote:Midnight poems.
Dark feelings.
Depression.
Connotations.

It had a very good finality too it, which is essential in the end of a poem.
I also thought that the lines made up of one word was a good touch, and breaks up the usual four-line stanza structure. This is good, I'm clicking like! Keep writing!
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Hey there,
great poem. It was well-thought-out, simply structured but truly effective. It flows! Bravo!
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I really liked your poem. A little jerky, I thought, but it gives you scenes to see in your head, which is what I love so much about it.
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