A New Born Killer - Deleted

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Hey, this was a good poem. I'll nitpick at some things though.

I feel i've been contaminated.

I've. And the line should be, 'I feel like I've been contaminated.

I believe I've been cursed

Period.

The menory still fresh in my mind,

Spelling error. Memory.

Yet, he is the blame,

Yet, he is to blame,

All i feel for him is diss.

I.

I see my life layed out before me,
Full of scorn and hatered.

I see my life laid out before me,
Full of scorn and hatred.

Blieveing I must be brought to justice

Believing.

They had a colide.

Collide.

Two tips for you:
1. Take care to capitalise your 'I's.
2. Double check your spelling.

My favourite stanzas were these:

The notion swelling inside of me,
Neither fear, nor depression,
But an anger so strong,
I had to let out an interjection.

Then there was mutany,
They had a colide.
My two feelings: of my love,
And of my pride.

Ignoring the spelling error, I liked these two stanzas very much and felt they stood out from the poem.

I enjoyed reading the poem. Keep writing!

Thanks, I do believe that my weakness is my spelling. I don't get to practice that anymore. Thanks again haha

Putting the spelling errors aside, really loved it.

haha thanx guys