That Sacred Slut

I like the use of imagery of the darkness
the use of metaphors made the reader more interested as we can visualize the
atmosphere!
I think the first part of he poem was really good!
I think this poem can relate to many people too as i know someone who has experienced horrors like this!

I like the use of imagery of the darkness
the use of metaphors made the reader more interested as we can visualize the
atmosphere!
I think the first part of he poem was really good!
I think this poem can relate to many people too as i know someone who has experienced horrors like this!

This was pretty cool, I like it. Other than a few rythym complications (which mosst everybody else has already told you about in earlier posts) I think it was relitively error free. Kudos. I like the last segment the most. Go chick power!

I really like this poem. As almost everyone else has said, its very dark. But it is also very intimidating. Every word is true in the sense of reality and how teenage life works. Guys who have sex are Gods and the girls are sluts. It's just messed up. I like this poem mostly because of its sad truth. Although, the ending did make me happy, about how she fought back in the end. The flow was great and the imagery was awesome, though I wish there was more from insid ethe girls head, not just about the peoples reactions around her and about the guy, but what she felt. Make the main character more realistic, give her confusion or something she is battling with inside maybe? Oh...sorry...I'm rambling again. Well, I'll stop now. Sorry.

Great writing,
Emmy

hi... Your poem was very deep and intense...But good also... I liked it and the details you have added made it a better experience... Darkness was good and nice and went with the theme of the poem...
Good job:)
harshita...

Amazing. Just utterly astounding. Well, now I sound stuck up so I'll stick with amazing. This was very good. It spoke to me and screamed emotion. A few issues but those can always be fixed. My favorite part is the last stanza, very moving. Good job. But where did this inspiration come from? Did you experience that? I apologize if you did. Good job with the writing and very nice on the wording and emotions in it. It was wonderful.

This poem was amazing. From the first sentence I was pulled in and couldn't stop reading. It was mesmerizing. People have already pointed out the mistakes, so I'm really just commenting. I liked that you used the derogatory words, "poetic and discreet words" wouldn't commonly be used in real life, and it made the scene seem more real when you used the words that would be used. Anyway, all in all I adored your poem and I hope to see more stuff like this amazing poem.

Wow, this was really good! I loved your beggining and ending. It has a dark feeling to it, which I really liked. This is a common theme, especially amongst teenagers, but you still managed to make it sound really unique. This poem had some really great imagery as well. You are really talented at writing! I thought that the flow was a little off in some parts, but that could have just been me.
One part that perhaps you should change is:
and she was just a girl in his list to bedChange the in to on, I think it would just sound more natural. Of course, that is only my personal opinion.

Great work! I loved it (: