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xanthan gum
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Mon Mar 06, 2006 11:23 pm
xanthan gum
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Mon Mar 06, 2006 11:23 pm
I'm combining
you in my
glass dream system
from gritty mornings to future
it's a project i took on only by free will
(you're all numbers to me)
is this poem worth pursuing?
Carpe Diem.
backgroundbob
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Tue Mar 07, 2006 12:05 am
backgroundbob
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Tue Mar 07, 2006 12:05 am
Yes.
Since it's not done, all I can say for critique is to make sure you get the punctuation in.
The Oneday Cafe
though we do not
speak
, we are by no means
silent.
ZanyPlebeian
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Tue Mar 07, 2006 2:56 pm
ZanyPlebeian
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Tue Mar 07, 2006 2:56 pm
Though you may have had a message to relay through further writing, I really like it just the way it is.
Bronco
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Wed Mar 08, 2006 9:06 am
Bronco
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Wed Mar 08, 2006 9:06 am
nah, it's not bad but really it needs to be longer imo...
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