Sanity vs. Love

I don’t need your heart,
I only need you.
You tell me you care,
And I hope it’s still true.

For if you were sane,
You’d have long ago quit
Playing my game,
'Cause I’m not worth your spit.

They tell me to breathe,
Yet I can’t even think.
I keep being weighed down,
And further I sink.

Brought down by what?
I desire to know.
I still search for answers,
but none of them show.

I’m devoid of air
when I need to scream
Then I feel constricted,
Like I might burst at the seams.

But I suppose I can guess
Why you feel like you do
And even though you love her,
I do still love you.

What I say never matters,
Nor what I feel or do.
“Why do you think this way?"
Because I know it’s true.

“More like a sister,”
You said to me.
But I don’t need a brother,
So please leave me be.

Hello!
I'm Jojo and I shall be your reviewer for today!
Grammar is in red.
Others are in blue.

I don’t need your heart,
I only need you.- Or " All I need"...either way, it's good.
You tell me you care,
And ( But?)I hope it’s still true.

For if you were sane,
You’d have long ago quit
Playing my game,
( because)I’m not worth your spit.

They tell me to breathe,
When I can’t even think!
I keep being weighed down,
And further I sink.
- really nice, and powerful. I love it.

Brought down by what( comma not needed)
I desire to know,( comma)
I still search for answers
But none of them show.

I’m devoid of air,
when I need to scream
Then I feel constricted,
And I might burst at the seams.

What I say never matters,
Nor what I feel or do.- period.
“Why do you think this way?"
Because I know it’s true.

“More like a sister,”
You said to me.
But I don’t need a brother,
So please just leave me.- what about" or please "let it be". "just leave me" sounds a bit...awkward.

Overall:
I love this poem
The rhyming is beautiful, and your perspective and ideas are well put together.
Only a few structural suggestions, but other than that- nice job!
Well done!

Keep writing!
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-Jojo

It was really catchy, like song lyrics. I liked it, actually. Good choice of wording and rhymes and rhythm. Because those are the biggest things when writing, and the hardest to get. Similes.

hey there,
Bravo!!!Keep up the good work!!

Hello! Morgan3509 here ! I loved this poem. It tells a story and reminds me of things that have happened in my life. It is always good to write about what you know, which is what all good poets do. I don't exactly get the line about "spit." could you explain that a little more maybe? That might be just me, but thats my opinion. Overall, the poem was very good!
I like this stanza:

They tell me to breathe,
When I can’t even think!
I keep being weighed down,
And further I sink.

It is very strong and uses detail to tell exactly what the person is feeling. Loved it!
Keep up the good work!
~Morgan3509

Loved this!!!! The emotion is great and the topic is very easy to relate to. I like the overall flow of this poem, keep up the good work!

Heyy - FIrst Off: I LOVED THIS! A long time ago, something like this happened to me, and you so expertly captured all the emotions and questions and thoughts... you know you've done a spectacular job when your reader is forced to feel what you're describing, or forced to go back to a memory and remember something. You displayed emotions so well in this... Super, super job!! D
There were just a couple things that threw me off, or that i would change, nothing major though, dont worry(:

BehindtheMask wrote:I don’t need your heart,
I only need you.
You tell me you care,
And I hope it’s still true.

For if you were sane, - I think 'but' might work better here, rather than 'for'... they both work though...
You’d have long ago quit
Playing my game,
'Cause I’m not worth your spit. - i agree with Morgan3509 on this one, it rhymes, but it feels incredibly forced and very confusing...

They tell me to breathe,
When I can’t even think! - im not really a fan of this single exclaimation point here...
I keep being weighed down,
And further I sink.

Brought down by what?
I desire to know.
I still search for answers,
but none of them show. - i love this stanza.

I’m devoid of air
when I need to scream
Then I feel constricted,
And I might burst at the seams. - Take out 'and'. It messes with the rhythym.

But I suppose I can guess
Why you feel like you do
And even though you love her,
I do still love you. - i feel like the 'do' isn't necessary, but, yet when i read it without it, it sounds off. Play around with that maybe...

What I say never matters,
Nor what I feel or do.
“Why do you think this way?"
Because I know it’s true.

“More like a sister,”
You said to me.
But I don’t need a brother,
So please leave me be. - My favorite stanza out of it all! You summed up the whole thing in this part and very well too!

Again - Awesome work! Keep it up!

-PurpleHeart