In a minute

I don't know what inspired me to write this, but I am wrote it... enjoy..

Spoiler

When the clock hits two
I can tell you
250 babies breath their first
113 will starve and thirst
3 are shot on U.S. land
2 are thrown from car to sand
523 is what Opera makes
5 times the Earth’s ground quakes
360 flashes light the earth
15 defects began at birth
As you see
there is a ton
Before the minute hand
Hits the one.

This was kind of cool to read. I liked it. It seemed very brief though, so I'm sorry if my review doesn't really help any. Just wanted to say great job This is pretty different.

When the clock hits two
I can tell you This line seems short compared to the first one...
250 babies breath their first
113 will starve and thirst I dunno if you can "thirst", it sounds in the wrong context
3 are shot on U.S. land
2 are thrown from car to sand
523 is what Opera makes Opera... What do you mean what they make? Like Oprah Winfrey or like the Phantom of the Opera?
5 times the Earth’s ground quakes Awkward wording, it doesn't flow right into each other
360 flashes light the earth
15 defects began at birth
As you see
there is a ton
Before the minute hand
Hits the one. Love >3

Yay, Unun! This was a great poem and I liked the facts you added into here, some of the rhyming and meter could be edited and I agree with the previous reviewer in the matter that this poem could be elaborated on. Just be careful if you're adding anything because it could mess up the perfect simplicity to it.

Love.love.love.love!

Yes, it is a bit brief, because the rest of the things I could find were stupid money facts...

Wow this is great

Although I love creativity and opinion, I have a real soft spot for facts.
So combining both of them was just great.

I don’t have a lot of patience for poetry with a lot of adjectives and description, because It can just feel like fluff.
I love how all the sentences are short, punchy and hard hitting.

I love this poem. It's the first time I've read a factual poem like this. I thought it was pretty good. Keep writing!

I really liked this poem... Actually, it's different than what I've ever read before, so I found it interesting... I especially liked the facts. Altogether, a good read...

Hey!
I really liked this poem! It was different than any other kind of poem I have ever read before. It was sweet how you used statistics to make up every line (well pretty much every line). While it could use a few tweaks, I agree with the one's stated by DelanieHeart, it was still written very well!

Keep it up, I hope to read more of your poems

-Jessa