To Cheat Death

emmylou1995 wrote:Death is such a one-sided argument. Death is an argument?
We have no say, no choice in when to die. You don't have to tell me things I already know.
If at all one lives, then one shall as well die, Whoa. Wording's really weird here. Also, both of these last two lines end with "die," so it sounds odd.
as all living things must.

To live is to die, and to die is to live.

When one is gone, they are never truly gone, Just like how this table is a table, but it's not a table. Guess what? This doesn't work.
l just living in Utopia, Heaven. Huh?
(Down a block from Alpha and Omega and to the left towards Christianity)

Though, when one passes away,
for them it is finally judgement day. Now there's a rhyme scheme?

What to do? This is what people say when they're bored. Doesn't fit.
What can we do to cheat death?
Is it possible, can it be? "Can it be" sounds pretty lame.

The answer sleeps on the edge of insanity, Looong.
the horizon of the mind.

Think...

To live is to die, and to die is to live.

What then would happen if we were never to die? Reword this.
Would we then never live as well?

Death is such
a one-sided argument.
We have no say,
no choice in when to go.

To live is to die
and to die is to live. Cliche.

When one is gone
their lives carry on
throughout the legacy
they left here
on Earth.

And when one dies,
they have only gone home.

Home to Heaven.
(Down a block from Alpha and Omega
and to the left towards Christianity)

What can we do to cheat death?
Is it even possible?

The answer sleeps
on the edge of insanity,
the horizon of the mind.

Think...

To live is to die
and to die is to live.

What then would happen
if we had the chance
to never, ever die?

Would we then never live
as well? Nice

Death is such
a one-sided argument.
We have no say,
no choice in when to go.

To live is to die
and to die is to live. This was okay, but kind of an "mmmmm?" moment.

When one is gone
their lives carry on
throughout the legacy
they left here
on Earth. I think you should reword this stanza.

And when one dies,
they have only gone home. I really like this part.

Home to Heaven.
(Down a block from Alpha and Omega
and to the left towards Christianity)

What can we do to cheat death?
Is it even possible?

The answer sleeps
on the edge of insanity,
the horizon of the mind.

Think...

To live is to die
and to die is to live.

What then would happen
if we had the chance
to never, ever die? Maybe reward this too?

Would we then never live
as well? Like this last line.