Goodnight.

Well, aren't you a hero?...
Tears have been shed for you, son.
Hearts have bled from the battles you 'won'
and there is no time to remember the fun
times banished to sulk past a dusky red sun.

Thorn in foot, tongue in cheek,
allowed to part the 'righteous' and meek;
allowed to label lies with an odour, it reeks
of 'salvation' and tobacco that peeks

through flared nostrils, and a deathly glare,
now it seems that nobody cares
for your explanations; they just stand and stare,
and stop. That's enough.

So I can't have you back.
I'll just settle for that.
I won't apologise for the most sincere of lies.
I won't let you scrutinize any chance of reprise.
I'll never forget. I'll never think twice,
so this is my last word. Goodnight.

((OMG! It rhymes!!!))

I liked this poem, I felt that the rhyming was a bit weird in the first stanza, but that can be fixed. I loved the rhyming and the language used in the second stanza aswell. I liked this poem because it was very straight to the point. You used great imagry and I loved the kind of sing song way in which it came across to me. The narrator didn't seem upset, to me they seemed kind of, hurried and angry. I think you have somethng really good here. Keep at it, I know you will do great
xx Matt

This was fairly good. I can catch the emotion you were going for. I would suggest adding some commas, though, or else it sounds a bit choppy.

So I can't have you back.
I'll just settle for that.
I won't apologise for the most sincere of lies.
I won't let you scrutinize any chance of reprise.
I'll never forget. I'll never think twice,
so this is my last word. Goodnight.

That had to be my favorite part. For some reason, this just spoke to me more than any other part of the poem.
Well done.

Cool,it does rhyme very good.I love the way it sounds.

I liked reading your work... I specially loved the ending... It forms a detailed picture and that's the thing I liked about it the most... Keep writing...