Young Writers Society

I stood in the doorway,
my little feet below.
The sun shone in on me.
The warm rays felt different,
than now.

Back in the day,
everything seemed so close to me,
now it feels bland and all the same,
but once,
in a long, long while,
I get the feeling of those memories.

Indescribable it is,
very enjoyable, too.
It's what pulls me to my memories;
why I can't let go.

When I get that feeling, now,
I resent it.
It's humid, welcoming—
and that's not even a description.
I want it gone.
I have a future, and it's new.
The past is humid,
the present is bland.
I long for a day of new,
One that brings the new dawn.

One that I can look forward too.
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This poem just kind of hit me. It seems very meaningful to me, and—wait, my furnace just came on and it's too hot! —I hope you get the emotion from it. Please tell me the meaning you get, and if you know that feeling. I really can't describe it and all my life I've wondered if other people know that feeling.

--Skis(pronounced with the i sounding like i, not e(not the plural of a Ski)):P

There seems to be a little of you in it! A little too subjective in brief.. But the flow is great! I did have a feeling that is quite common in my life but i don't know if it is the same as your's. It's how i feel when i think of the days when i was younger and the world seemed so different and i was so ignorant! No matter what exactly you have tried to put in..You have successfully made a point and you've done it brilliantly.. All those tough emotions to be described takes a lot of sensitivity and the appropriate talent.. There is also a charm in the design that i cant explain. It is just unique because it is one of the most abstract things and you have utilized the true power of literature that is to leave the perseverance to the reader! You undoubtedly proved yourself.. Great job! Keep it on!

"in a long long while,"
Comma between long and long. Use commas to show you are listing something.

I get the feeling of those memories
Indescribable it is,
"I get the feeling of those memories" Reads as the finishing thought of the stanza, so you may want to put a period after "memories". If, with "it", you are referring to "those memories" then that would definitely make that next line a new sentence/thought.

"It's what pulls me to my memories;
why I can't let go."
Nix the semi-colon. You only use a semi-colon to connect two complete thoughts that are related. "why I can't let go" is not a complete thought. You can replace it with a comma to list two individual thoughts on 'It'. Or, you can use a colon (:) to make "why I can't go" the thing that which "It" in "it's" is referring to.

"It's humid, welcoming—"
Do you mean 'it is' or 'it's' as an expression of ownership? If you meant ownership of 'it' then you would remove the apostrophe, but looking at your previous use of 'It's', it would seem you simply meant to use 'it is' again, and if so, then no worries.

The past is humid,
You use "humid" in the third line of this stanza. Unless "it", in the third line, is "The past" as well, then you are describing two separate entities as the exact same thing "Humid". If you describe two separate things with the same word, that will bring them closer in meaning and symbolism in the writing. If you want that, then keep it, but if that;s not the meaning you are aiming for, you may want to fix that.
If "it" and "the past" are the same thing, then know that by describing them both as humid will make the reader draw a line between the two and understand there is a correlation. (which is good, lol)

Please tell me the meaning you get,
Drawing on the imagery you provide in the first stanza, it sounds like you are looking back on your life. Looking at yourself as a child or you are presently seeing yourself as such.

and if you know that feeling.
Oh most definitely. Everything was so new and exciting, and now it's simply just life. But, you look forward in the hopes it may provide that newness as it once did in the past.

Love the imagery,
Love your wording and how ungrounded your thought structure is. It's very much like thinking out loud, but it is clear and you have a direction with which you lead us to. First we see the past with you, then the present, then you speak of your hopes for the future.

If I am completely wrong.
Well,
I enjoyed it, all the same.

Please tell me the meaning you get, and if you know that feeling. I really can't describe it and all my life I've wondered if other people know that feeling.

--> The meaning I got is maybe you are somewhat reminiscing, long long feeling? You seem so happy in your childhood or past years and then now, you felt not the same way that you felt in those years. :3 that's my opinion. I think you're seeing a lot of changes that you're not used to.

--> the feeling? I don't know what to call that either, but I feel that feeling right now. :3