glory

I know its not a fantastic title^^


we had a dream
of ruling
all the seven seas

the dream
was fought for
and we lost
her
the beautiful dream

the shame we brought forthe
and all
victory less
glory

the dream was
alive
again

we fought
we fought

this is war
allies from the north!
from the south!

come brothers
fight
for our glory

against the
victim less disraught

the glory we won
was shameful
and
we were sinful
oh so sinful!

that we jumped
we jumped
a great leap
of time

to the
deaths
of civilians
we fell with them
now
sorrow was unkept

--> good story! :3

Thought I'd help with the punctuation ^.^

We had a dream -
of ruling
all the seven seas.

The dream
was fought for
but we lost
her;
the beautiful dream.

The shame we brought forth
and all
victory less
glory. [This stanza is slightly confusing. I think you should try rewording it slightly.]

The dream was
alive
again -

We fought,
We fought;

Allies from the north! Allies from the south! This is War! [This is just how I would write this stanza.]

Come brothers,
fight -
for our glory!

Against the
victimless distraught;

The glory we won
was shameful -
and
we were sinful.
Oh so sinful!

That we jumped,
we jumped
a great leap
of time;

To the
deaths
of civilians
we fall with them
now.
sorrow was unkept.

Those are just the things I would do

I really like this poem. But, what is it about? and what is the motive? I know I ask a lot of questions but thats how you get answers and this poem is really good, thats why I want answers. i like the way you did the stanzas. Keep writing, you are doing good. Smiles