If I Were a DC Writer [NOW AVAILABLE ON ITUNES]

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Guys, thank you. =) I want you to know that I'm considering each and every review/comment I get. That's a fact. And it's up to people whether they choose to believe it or not.

I may have said this a dozen times: Thank you! :D
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You have such a good voice and it's a really good song too. Thats all I have to say. Keep up the great work! :D
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I didn't care too much for this. The singing was too boring as well. Try harder next time




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Oh, hi, crestfallen! :D Thanks for taking the time to check this out! I'm not expecting to please everyone though. =) Who can? :lol:

Thanks, cupcake! ;**
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HAHAHAHAHA WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWWWW MrMcnasty really had fun there! (Yes, I know his real name is something different.)
I'm not sure if I never want him to review my stuff, or if I want him to review everything RIGHT NOW so I can get used to it. XD
Seriously, it cracked me up cuz he was so harsh. (Is that bad? Meh, I think you'll get it, right? Right?)

I absolutely love it. Seriously, it's been stuck in my head for days.
As for the title, meh....some songs by popular artists have two titles, and they're really successful.
From the opposite viewpoint, you should either use the original title and let people guess, or just use Melancholy Tune--it fits the mood of the song and it's a line near the end, so it's a good fit.

I think it's funny that someone else said you were an alto--I love you most on the high notes, and thought you struggled with the low ones sometimes in the other songs you have on youtube. (I have trouble putting power intoe the lower lyrics myself.) I love the peaceful feeling, and I think most people, especially teens, can identify with it fairly easily.

I did notice something--you talk about the sky being gloomy even though it's lit up by the moon in the chorus, and then say you'll stay under this gray sky for a while--which is it? (XD)

All in all, it makes me think of one of the Batboys standing on the rooftops at night, possibly talking to a love interest. (It could go so many different ways in the DCU. Like, it could fit practically any character, I think.)
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Oh yeah, forgot to say--I don't like the lines. They're not necessary--any pauses/etc in the song should be added vocally (except for the mandatory different lines/stanzas, of course.) I think they take away more than they add to the lyrics.
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I have to agree with Crestfallen
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@ animekaratepup, no... that review also cracked me.

Okay, the first description of the sky could be literal to the story line of the song. The second one is figurative. ;-) Sharp, girl! sharp! xD Thanks for the like. ;**
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HAHAHA, what is it about really mean stuff that makes people laugh? At some point it goes from "Aww, that's so mean. :'(" To "HAHAHAHAHAHA it was so mean I love I want to read it a million times" (well maybe not but still.) :P

And I wonder if the people who think it's boring have ever listened to classical music. NOT attacking, just wondering....... *walks away whistling*
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xD I love classical music. (LOL) Nice question. I'm wondering now, too. ;)

The truth is, I'm in a lot of other genres, too. This is just the first we could record 'cause it's simple. =))
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This is now available on iTunes! xD
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Hello there,

Personally I loved this. It was expressive, interesting and spoke truthfully. For me this was a really great reassuring bit of writing. Unfortunately though I couldn't manage to access the you tube clip so I just looked 0ver the lyrics and they were very cool! I couldn't find any flaws in this and the grammar was also good. I liked the whole thing from the title to the concluding line. Keep up the great lyric writing and I hope that next time you tube won't be so annoying and that I will actually get to watch the clip! :D Great stuff Jash!

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Thanks, sweetie! Go CSI! xD
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Jash..... Wow.
Just wow. This is so peaceful and powerful - I absolutely love it. You have a beautiful, wonderful voice. The music is lovely and the lyrics are so well put together. Such talent!
Promise me something? Don't you ever stop singing.
Beautiful.
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