Government Takeover

I look around at all the lying propaganda corrupting the streets and the young men and women joining big brothers army for control of this infinite sorrow world. Every day is a riot of self destruction towards the supposed beautiful land of the free. I ponder on politicians corrupting our minds with lies on how thing will get better. The government tries to make justice but instead it becomes corruption. We need to be one nation, one person, no borders, no evil. But instead big brother sends us to jail for false crimes. The corrupted Fascism and Communism will take over! Its becoming a goverment take over!

This is very interesting, I assume you are reading 1984, ofcourse. Actually I am planning to read this book after I read Moby-Dick. The only problem I had, was that it had no real poetry layout, or anything involving poetry about it. At first, it looks Ike just an average paragraph. Perhaps you should expand on it? Over all, an interesting idea, keep up the good work!

Listen to this throughout your reading of this. Believe me, you need to.

rancidpunx97 wrote:I look around at all the lying propaganda corrupting the streets and the young men and women joining big brothers army for control of this infinite sorrow world. Every day is a riot of self destruction towards the supposed beautiful land of the free. I ponder on politicians corrupting our minds with lies on how thing will get better. The government tries to make justice but instead it becomes corruption. We need to be one nation, one person, no borders, no evil. But instead big brother sends us to jail for false crimes. The corrupted Fascism and Communism will take over! Its becoming a goverment take over!

Rancid. There's simply too much here to even begin on a single point worth anything of merit.

I'm going to be frank: do you even understand what Fascism and Communism are as political, economic, and social systems (if you did you'd also know they aren't actually all three of those)? That's what you pin this entire...uh, bit of poetry on. You're streamlining the ignorance which is typical of Americans today. I can say Americans thanks to "land of the free" cliche nonsense, and the curious appearance of this now under President Obama. Maybe it's your age, HELL, I pray it is your age and I am an Atheist! My first bit of advice? Toss every piece of nonsense your schooling, family, friends, and local area has told you about what you should think and see America as, and open your own eyes. This isn't art, it's not your own genuine expression. It's the diatribe I'd find on FOX new's comment sections. OR the polar opposite of what's found in the Huffington Post. Both equally deplorable factories of bile.

We are NOT in 1984. We are in a system that sends our "countrymen" (I hate patriotism, shoot me, I don't care) off to pointless rich-men's wars for economic interests. This is a geo-political system of power which mandates who gets to push what around and how things are done. Very simple= Power equals opportunity. You have it or you don't.

There is no great evil on the other side. That's garbage that's been forced into your mind through cultural and stereotypical archetypes in drama. You cannot objectively speak about morality until you admit this. It is limited to your point of view, and perhaps your point of view is something you take for granted, because quite honestly my man, if I were take an early 20th century Communist Party slogan from any country that Communism was prevalent in, you write exactly like the thing you think you oppose.

Go search and see. I'll look further into your "writing" just so I'm not told I didn't.

I look around at all the lying propaganda corrupting the streets and the young men and women joining big brothers army for control of this infinite sorrow world.

Propoganda? What do you think art is? The truth? A fundamental virtue? Drop the naivety, and get real. Propoganda is constantly prevalent, it's endemic of what ideas are. Every culture to my extent of understanding has this. And really? Where's the corruption? If you don't provide me an example, this is propoganda you're writing. Hell, even if you did, it still would be.
You should be made guilty of godwin's law in my opinion with listing "Big Brother" as if that validates your point of view. What does that even mean to the average person? This is like Sarah Palin putting up her picture of "crosshairs" on districts to reload and retake...stop playing a victim when you're the offender. It's dishonest and intellectually deplorable. This is manipulative tosh with no perspective.

Every day is a riot of self destruction towards the supposed beautiful land of the free. I ponder on politicians corrupting our minds with lies on how thing will get better. The government tries to make justice but instead it becomes corruption.

Yeah. Riot of destruction. Oh the insanity. Look at all of the people rioting. The inhumanity. People are mad with every president. Their guy doesn't get in. Cry me a river. And now this is the end? Am I supposed to take this seriously? You ponder on politicians, well I ponder on your lightly veiled attempt at alliteration. LOL And things won't get better.

You really don't get what you're saying. You're an echochamber my man. You're parroting the news, you're parroting people around you, you aren't creating anything.
Look: Economic meltdown
>leads to
no liquidity in money
>means that
we can't get loan money
>which means
Keynesian economics can't work
>and leaves us with the option of
a. Leave business to die and no jobs and a great depression
b. Give them money by creating money & hope a windfall occurs

There is no good option. There is NO SHORT TERM SOLUTION. That is your main problem. You are viewing this in the short term. It's obvious, because media doesn't want you to get near the idea of a long term idea. Hell to the no. That means you have to think and consider things, that means you aren't easily manipulated.

I'm stopping there for your sake and my sake. Just delete this. Forget it. It is not something I would even think about in the future. Go out and discover the world for yourself. Go abroad. Meet people that are supposedly bad "Marxists" & "communists" and the evil influence. Americans seem to just all too happily castigate Europe. A damn shame. Worst of all is France. People hate the French everywhere because of the past and we all parrot the same ideas, generation to generation. Napoleon happened. The French Empire happened. Whatever. They kicked butt for a couple centuries, then England, etc. Are you going to call them Capitalist Imperialist pigs? (I bother to bring up the French because without their Navy, we Americans don't exist my man!)

These things go in cycles. Politics works in cycles. All you are doing is feeding into fear and a fervor that encourages what you supposedly want to avoid. Become an educated rebel, no, advocate for change and growth. Give up this idea of a rebel. As of now this is an affront to respectable art. If you are incensed with anger after reading this, I am not apologizing. America is not worthy of being made into laurels. It is a unique country in foundation, but that's it. Get rid of this American Exceptional-ism idea. So instead of sending me a hate-filled message or letting a mod know I'm a mean person, breath. Think. Grow. Study. And then come back.

I wrote this in 5th grade when i was reading Edgar Allen Poe and animal farm so i just wanted to start writing anything like that. I recently found it so i felt like sharing it to see if my writing back then was good.