Nice, can't comment on it so much, but... found a mistake here:
Trust is so worth acheiving.
It should be "achieving".
I thought that this line:
(Hey look that rhymes!)
was pretty good, it makes the reader more involved in the poem.
Julie, a sucker for romance, historical fashion, medieval fairs and blues music. Add photography and you already know me 50%. The rest of me you'll discover through my writings and my photos.
Welcome DarkVanilla, I only have one thing to say really. I loved it, I was a good poem. Keep writing!
God gives us our relatives - thank God we can choose our friends. - Ethel Watts Mumford A real friend is one who walks in when the rest of the world walks out. - Walter Winchell “I’ll Surprise you, I promise” -Adam Lambert
You're wrong about humanity. They are your greatest creation because they're better than you are. Sure, they're weak, and they cheat and steal and destroy and disappoint, but they also give and create, and they sing and dance and love. Above all, they never give up. — Metatron
