Shattered

*This was written a while ago, it's not that good. Also, I wasn't quite sure what section to put this in, so if it needs to be moved go ahead. (:

You gave me hope
You gave me faith
You took me home
You gave me strength

Like a bird in the sky
You raised me high
You gave me more
You let me soar

As the wounds began to heal
And the way you made me feel
I knew that this was true
All I wanted was you

Then it all changed
And my heart began to break
I was sick of your games
How much more could I take?

Crimson red tears
Flooded from my wrists
The pain of past years
Brought me to my wits

My wings became battered
I began to fall
You watched as I shattered
Too late to call

well....this is a very deep poem....the kind i LOVE to read...it is really very nice...keep up your works...

I really like it..sounds like lyrics from a rap song..beautiful.
100 points (I give this many points because it's really good and I don't know the maximum)
Maybe make it longer next time.
KEEP IT UP
--kyle

It makes me think of breakups. it was sad yet filled with love. In other words I LOVED IT.

You gave me hope
You gave me faith
You took me home
You gave me strength (Very very good)

Like a bird in the sky
You raised me high
You gave me more
You let me soar (also good)

As the wounds began to heal
And the way you made me feel
I knew that this was true
All I wanted was you (My favorite)

Then it all changed
And my heart began to break
I was sick of your games
How much more could I take?

Crimson red tears
Flooded from my wrists
The pain of past years
Brought me to my wits (Its still good, but in this stanza it became harder for me to read. I had to reread it a few times)

My wings became battered
I began to fall
You watched as I shattered
Too late to call

I really really liked it. Keep at it!!!

This was so good !!
The rhyming didn't sound forced at all and the poem flowed really good (:
Good work !!