Trying to Define Art

Trying To Define Art

“art,” she announced, as she tied her intestines in a bow, “is the ability to rip out all your innards, and spill them on a surface in whichever manner you choose.”

she stood up, smashed her skull spectacularly, drew around the fragments, ripped off her foot and attached it to a bust of Pallas before breaking down and weeping, staining her fingernails with a murky concoction of what looked like blood and ink.
she then proceeded to explode.

and as I sat there, my tiny frail heart in my hands, I thought, how am I supposed to beat that?

One word is stuck in my head each time I re-read this: "Wow."

Honestly, I wish I could allow myself to get away with writing something so short and so free. I'm stuck in my little rut, and seeing the freedom of this makes me a little jealous. Your narrator at the end is really resonating me. I thought I wrote some good stuff; this is great.

I really can't find anything blatantly wrong with it, so all I can say is keep it up, and let me know when you post something else.

kf

I love the gorey, edgy feel. I particularly like how you don't limit the metaphore to the dialouge, but rather include it in the dialougue and the naration. The last line wrapped it up spectacularly. The legnth is good, short and to the point.

As was said in the two reviews before me, it takes a really talented writer to be able to produce something so raw, moving, and blatent in such a short piece.
I have no real constuctive criticizm, sorry. But I can tell you to keep up the good work, and if you would like some more reviews, you can post your work on my WRFF thread (the link to it is below on my signature).
Keep writing!
-Alex

I never read anything so short and direct but yet still convey the same feelings as others that are longer !
This is excellent

This is really good, unusual and keeps your audience eating out of your hands. You had a good usage of words and the way you shortened this up and made the story linger after it was over , was nothing short of amazing. Very nice work. Don't add on, leave them guessing. Keep the mystery.

WOW. What an amazing picture this creates! I LOVE this. Not like, LOVE. Oh, the beauty! The artistry... GREAT JOB.

This sort of reminded me of a part of Hannibal. Where Dr. Lector suggests the dude try to skin his own face to feed to his dog.

Anyway.. Keep writing!

xoxo,
Kiicoh.

This is something a poor reader like me wouldn't understand. >.< It's rather exaggerated and quick. It's like an explosion to me, as simple as that - a quick literary explosion. It's too quick that I can't take it all in. Bah! *slaps myself* Nice imagery, though.

I'm just slow. lol Sorry. I actually understood it...but when I read the 2nd paragraph, I was like 'What?' And it left a bang in my head that caused me to be unable to comprehend it all. Other than that, you should capitalize the beginnings of the paragraphs.

(I'm ashamed of myself with this review )

OH.MY.GOD!!! How in the world did you write this? You make me feel so...inferior.

*bows*

I shall follow you know!

I love this soooooo much!

dude....this was brilliant!!! I mean i have never ever read anything like this before...!!! unbelievable!!! Hats off to you mate!!!

WOW, disregard the un-thoughtfullness of not capitalizing letters that should have been capitalized, this is E-P-I-C. I have no other words for it, especially now that I know the un-capitalization was deliberate. Am I right, or am I right? I'm right, of course...

Just wow, I'm speechless.

I don't want to overuse the W word, but...wow! xD Capitalization helps, but melikes.

Hello there,

This is just gorgeous. I've rarely read something so short but with so much raw emotion. Really your presice vocabulary, the rhythm and tone of it all is just breathtaking. This is true art and there are not enough words within me to tell you how much I enjoyed this.

Thank you.

<BrooklynWriters mouth gapes open she is speechless at the amazingness of the passage>

Haha, that was actually kind of disturbing. I don't know if that's what you were going for, but it worked! xD Anyway, I wish I could write something as creative as that. I seem to be trapped in a box most of the time. That was really good though! Nice job!