Praise of Follies

It just came to me when i'm reading about Erasmus. His tolerant attitude in many fields like religion really impressed me.And that shall be a steep contrary to many of his contemporaries and succecessors.

When one day, I turned open

the old, wreck`d history book

one thousand of valours, knights,

kings and ministers came

with all their virtues:

Bravery, Honesty, Resistence

and so on and on

Which could not interest me

not only when a little, pale elder

came with his petty folded pamphlet

Then I started upon

reading such joyful chapters

where all kings and barons gone

I saw some short-men

With their coats of many holes

and their worn shoes

suspiciously and hostily

watching another group of humans

----wandering, eating, wasting,

loving and laughing

when flowers had to blossom

amongst the most jolly guys

and those who were dull

forever staying in their mice-holes

Let misery and jealousy

Gone with them, only joys

remained for thus happy men

----Afer all, if you ever want

the author`s name

I shall tell you

people call him Eramus of Rotterdam

with his kind book

Praise of Follies

Hey and welcome to YWS, I'm kind of new myself, so, HIGH FIVE!!!!

I haven't got much to say about this poem; I haven't read the book you've based it on so I tried my best, but please forgive me for any mistakes .

I'm guessing that you wrote this from your own past experience, from when you first read it, but I did feel like you could of added some more detail on how you were feeling. If the reader doesn't know how the character is feeling, then the can't feel any emotion from this poem theirselves. Especially since your poem doesn't follows a beat, doesn't rhyme, and is a free-line poem, it shouldn't matter if you add a few extra details to your poem.

Then I started upon
reading such joyful chapters

where all kings and barons gone

These lines seemed a bit awkward for me to read as they were the only ones as they rhymed. Maybe change the third line to 'where all the kings and barons vanished' or something like that. It's just a suggestion, it's your choice.

loving and laughing

Just wanted to say, AWESOME ALLITERATION!

Also, I think that your ending was a bit sudden and rushed, maybe build on it more as it seemed like you had just write a poem and cut it in half. I would of ended with just one word. Or maybe you could end it with your personal veiw of the book. I would of enjoyed to hear more about what you like about the story.

Overall, I think that the content of your poem wasn't bad at all, but you lacked emotion and truthfully, I didn't feel any. Sorry. Although it was good for your first piece, my first piece was very bad.

Hope this helped . Hope to hear more from you soon.