Quiznos

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Quite the fast-food chain, you are.
Undertaking the art of sub-making
In this competitive market. With
Zeal you conduct combat with your
Nemesis, Subway. But alas, they'll
Overtake you always, due to your overpriced
Subs and shameful advertisements.

Haha, this is hilarious! an ode to Quiznos; how refreshingly original and unique! I take it you are fond of the place?

Well, because of its brevity, I don't have many nitpicks, but here's what I have: (My notes are in bold)

shiney1 wrote:Sorry if something is wrong, I submitted this on my iTouch.


Quite the fast-food chain Thoughtful of you to mention this for the people who've never seen a Quiznos, you are.
Undertaking the art of sub-making I like this particular part; do you really consider sub-making an art?
In this competitive market Ain't that the truth!. With
Zeal you conduct combat with your
Nemesis Great word choice here!, Subway. But alas, they'll
Overtake you always, due to your overpriced
Subs and shameful advertisements. Aha! The truth comes out!

I think the format is very clever (the classic scheme of letter poem, in a new, and artistically creative way), and, as mentioned earlier, the topic is intensely unique! The grammer is very good, and I especially like the part at the end where, after all the sympathies, you show your true opinion!

Great job!! I love a good, brief piece!

Thanks for the review! I actually have never eaten there, I am a Subway gal, but I have looked around their reviews and their commercials and subs. Many not good, and thumbs way down on the commercials! But a good number of people like them, so I guess is depends on the restaurant you go to?

I like it. I don't think I've ever been to Quizno's. Anyways, good work!

-Liz

These poems are all very clever and adorable. I really love how comedic it is. Woooonderful job. I love how you sum up just random subjects in these small acrostic poems.