What am I sposed' to do?

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Retaining too many emotions at the moment,
Other's trying to tell me what's best for me?
I think not,
They know nothing of my life.
Why do they presume they do?
And yeah fine, you may not feel the same
But I don't care
I do have feelings for you.
I can't help that.
I can try.
I'll fail.
I don't want to stop.
It feel's good.
So why?
Why bother telling me otherwise?
It's my life, let me live it how I want,
Not how you want me to live it.
Tell me i'm being a fool,
I'll agree but deep down i'm not listening.
What's in my mind, stay's in my mind.
What's going on in my heart?
You don't need to know.
It's easier to lie about something than to tell the truth.
It's easier to say I love you when you don't mean it.
Afterall...
You may say those 3 word's.
But when you do, you don't mean it how I do
I actually do love you, but I could never tell you.
And I don't think I ever will.
But then yet again people tell me what I should be doing,
Say i'll regret it if I don't.
Why?
You care for me?
Your helping?
You really believe that?
Don't want to see me hurt?
Too late for that.
I'm hurt. not physical pain though...
Funny that.
We spend time together,
Then the next day seem's as if i've been forgotten about.
It's alright,
I'm not really important...well not in your life atleast.
Your never going to understand how much you mean too me.
And that's just the problem,
Your never gonna' understand how I feel about you,
So what am I sposed' to do?
Carry on how I am,
Going through all this confusion,
Waiting for something to happen?
Just on the off chance it'll go my way?
Or do I give up?
Let everything crash and burn.
Fuck me up perhaps?
Or will it help me?
I don't know what to do,
Come on then,
You know what's best for me
So you tell me...
What do i do?
Last edited by Amyttobi on Fri Feb 11, 2011 10:34 pm, edited 1 time in total.




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Yeshh! Woop! I really like it because you expect guys to be so unemotional about this kind of stuff, but you're not, but hey I already knew that. ;) ly matty xx




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thats right!!! do what you wanna do! break free from conformaty!!!! welcome to YWS!!!!! it's good to see another expessive poet and writer!
to be continued.....




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haha, you're thirteen but you rated it sixteen? :) Was it because of the swearing, it was only one word so it's okay to drop it down to a fifteen or twelve. I liked this, good emotion, I'm going to be nosy, did this happen to you?

So, because nobody nitpicked I'll go right ahead.

Amyttobi wrote:Retaining too many emotions at the moment,
Other's trying to tell me what's best for me? Okay, I don't quite understand why this is a question.
I think not,
They know nothing of my life.
Why do they presume they do?
And yeah fine, you may not feel the same.
But I don't care,
I do have feelings for you.
I can't help that.
I can try.
I'll fail.
I don't want to stop.
It feel's good.
So why?
Why bother telling me otherwise?
It's my life, let me live it how I want,
not how you want me to live it.
Tell me i'm being a fool,
I'll agree but deep down i'm not listening.
What's in my mind, stay's in my mind.
What's going on in my heart?
You don't need to know.
It's easier to lie about something than to tell the truth.
It's easier for you to say I love you when you don't mean it.
Afterall...
You may say those three word's,
but when you do,
you don't mean it how the way I do,
I actually do love you, but I could never tell you,
And I don't think I ever will.
But then yet again people tell me what I should be doing,
Say i'll regret it if I don't.
Why?
You care for me? I got a little confused on these two lines, are you asking them if they do or if they think they do? You need to make this more clear.
You're helping?
Do you really believe that?
Don't want to see me hurt?
Too late for that.
I'm hurt, not physical pain though...
Funny that.
We spend time together,
then the next day , itseem's as if I've been forgotten about.
It's alright,
I'm not really important... Well not in your life at least.
You're never going to understand how much you mean too me.
And that's just the problem,
You're never gonna' going to understand how I feel about you,
so what am I sposed to do?
Carry on how I am,
going through all this confusion,
waiting for something to happen?
Just on the off chance it'll go my way?
Or do I give up?
Let everything crash and burn.
Fuck me up perhaps?
Or will it help me?
I don't know what to do,
come on then,
You know what's best for me,
So you tell me...
What do i do?


Other than a few spelling and grammar mistakes it was brilliant :D I noticed you like using your 's, you should only use them when somebody owns something or two words are joined together, like; it is - it's. I thought there was good emotion in this, none that I would expect from a boy ( I wasn't suprised at the swearing though :P ) Overall thumbs up!

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Keep up the writing :)

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