What Words?

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How can I tell you
Just all that you are?
Words dance at the tip of my tongue,
And yet, other words seem so far.

What words then can be said,
That will define your every beauty and grace?
And what words can I say
That will make your heart race?

I cannot say that you are perfect,
Because you are so far beyond that fact;
But I can say that you are one of a kind,
This I know to the exact.

What words then can be uttered,
That will help warm your very heart?
And what words can I say
That will never depart?

I cannot say I will promise you the sun,
Because the sun is just too heavy a thing to hold;
But I can say I will remain by your side,
Even during the days in which we are old.

What words then can I express,
That will take your every ounce of breath away?
And what words can be said
That will forever make you stay?

I cannot say that we are infinite,
Because no one has ever touched infinity;
But I can whisper and promise to you this:
Our love will echo on into eternity.

2010 Vincent Cuccolo




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I LOVED this! So much emotion in it! And it's so very sweet! Bravo! Haha :D
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Thanks so much! This poem came truly from the heart! :D




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So honest and heartfelt, there is nothing to be critiqued about this because I can tell it truly came from the soul and it has the effect that you must of been feeling when you penned it. Whoever you wrote it for should be very happy and is lucky to have someone like you man. Honesty is the best policy in my opinion, and this is perfectly honest.
"This is our decision,
to live fast and die young...
Yeah it's overwhelming,
but what else can we do?
Get jobs in offices and
wake up for the morning commute?

The models will have children,
we'll get a divorce,
find some more models;
everything must run its course!

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How can I tell you
Just all that you are?
Words dance at the tip of my tongue,
And yet, other words seem so far.

What words then can be said,
That will define your every beauty and grace?
And what words can I say
That will make your heart race?

I cannot say that you are perfect,
Because you are so far beyond that fact; :D I like that you made that clear instead of making this person annoyingly perfect
But I can say that you are one of a kind,
This I know to the exact.

What words then can be uttered,
That will help warm your very heart?
And what words can I say
That will never depart?

I cannot say I will promise you the sun,
Because the sun is just too heavy a thing to hold;
But I can say I will remain by your side,
Even during the days in which we are old. Sweet!

What words then can I express,
That will take your every ounce of breath away?
And what words can be said
That will forever make you stay?

I cannot say that we are infinite,
Because no one has ever touched infinity; That's a lovely line. *tears up*
But I can whisper and promise to you this:
Our love will echo on into eternity.
Yay! Great poem! When you're famous, can I say that I knew you?
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Thanks so much, emmaline49! And by all means, when I get famous, tell people I was your best friend! Hahaha ;)




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I hope your love does echo eternally. i loved it. Really I did.




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How can I tell you
Just all that you are?
Words dance at the tip of my tongue, - love this line, wonderful personification
And yet, other words seem so far.

What words then can be said,
That will define your every beauty and grace? - I like the grace-race rhyme :) sounds beautiful
And what words can I say
That will make your heart race?

I cannot say that you are perfect,
Because you are so far beyond that fact;
But I can say that you are one of a kind,
This I know to the exact.

What words then can be uttered,
That will help warm your very heart? - heart-depart, another melodic rhyme
And what words can I say
That will never depart?

I cannot say I will promise you the sun,
Because the sun is just too heavy a thing to hold;
But I can say I will remain by your side,
Even during the days in which we are old.

What words then can I express,
That will take your every ounce of breath away?
And what words can be said
That will forever make you stay?

I cannot say that we are infinite,
Because no one has ever touched infinity;
But I can whisper and promise to you this:
Our love will echo on into eternity. - beautiful ending


That's a great piece of poetry you have here! I truly enjoyed reading it. Your punctuation is good, and the figures of speech well-chosen, creating a strong concept behind your words. :) Well-done!
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Wow. This is a little ironic... I just posted a poem my beloved wrote for me, because it meant that much to me, and then I read this... This is almost the perfect response to what he said! It is so moving, so beautiful...it made me sigh and think about what all I love about my man... Wonderful, wonderful job.
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The fifth stanza(although powerful) doesn't jive. It breaks it up, but be careful changing it, you could ruin the poem. It is a very powerful stanza. It could just be me though; I had to read that stanza about three times. Overall, great work. Wait, I lied, BLEEPING AMAZING work. Is that better? :D

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--> aaww! I think this is what love can really do, eh?? I'm soo in love with this :) good good poem!

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*My impression. Very good. I really like the lines from the start.
*I'm not quite a good critique so this is all I can say, if this piece is good or not :)
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Thank you, ShadowKnight155 and cali34rniasummer! Your feedback is most appreciated! :)




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That was such a heartfelt and honest poem.
All I can say is that it's amazing! I loved it!



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