To reach

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through out the seas,
beyond the world
there lies a place,
never seen by eyes
it is there as I believe,
in the one who'll never leave
he's there and most know,
but who knows where to go
heaven is there and so is hell
it's your choice,
but don't you tell
doing your best,I believe
is the only way to reach
GOD is there
for you and I
love him and have faith,
with them you can fly
to that place
just to reach
Last edited by HHemayed on Wed Feb 09, 2011 8:09 pm, edited 1 time in total.
To be alive is not to breathe, eat or drink. It's your ability to prove your existence.




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I LOVE THIS!!! it is how i feel. and it's very good your using your righting powers for good!
I LOVE to wright and read. It's a passion I have.




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HHemayed wrote:Through out the sees,- seas
beyond the world
There lies a place,
never seen by eyes
It is there as I believe,
in the one who'll never leave
He's there and most know,
but who knows where to go
Heaven is there and so is hell
It's your choice,
but don't you tell
Doing your best,I believe
is the only way to reach
GOD is there
for you and I
Love him and have faith,
with them you can fly
to that place
just to reach
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Wow first of all Ireally loved it, it is very mysterious and open for reader interpritation, I love that. However you were not consistent with capital letters and it does not look very neat because of that, I don't have prefrence but you really should choice one or the other. it is very poetic and you put a lot of feeling into it, keep up the good work!




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I loved it :pirate3:
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Thanks guys,I'm glad you liked it.I'll make sure I improve the way it looks.Honestly this is the first poem I've ever wrote and you guys really encouraged me.Thanks.:)
To be alive is not to breathe, eat or drink. It's your ability to prove your existence.



Minds are like parachutes. They only function when they are open.
— Sir James Dewar, Scientist