Let me

I wrote this with the help of a good friend.

Let me wipe away your tears. Let me fight away your fears.
Let me love you, let me love you.
Let me prove you're not what you seem.
Let me prove you're not just a dream.
Let me love you.
Let me show you what could be. Let me show you what I see.
Let me take you far away, let me give you my heart... if there's a way.
Lend me your hand, and I'll lead the way.
Let me love you, let me love you... someday.

Short and sweet is always nice! This is simple, but very heartfelt!

As for suggestions, my favorite line that you wrote, the 3rd line, ironically had one minor error:

"Let me prove you're not what you seem, let me prove your not just a dream."

Just change the "your" to the "you're" contraction so that the word makes the sentence make sense! You probably just missed it by accident the 2nd time.

Other then night, good job! Conciseness can both be a beautiful and powerful thing, so I've been told!

Nice! That's a really nice poem! It looked like a chorus of a great song and I wanna put a melody to it! xD Like what the other reviewer said, it's simple but very heartfelt!

I've only one nitpick:

Let me take you far away, let me give you my heart... if there's a way.

- The 2nd phrase can stand alone.

Nevertheless, great job!

Keep writing!

Thanks so much!

Nice work! This poem is just pure emotion. Normally I tend to like more imagery, but you do a very good job with it nonetheless.

The main problem I had was the flow. Not the words themselves, but in my mind it sounded a little bit jerky. This can be easily fixed with more effective line breaks. Every time I use *, that is where I would consider inserting a line break:

Let me wipe away your tears. Let me fight * away your fears.
Let me love you, let me * love you.
Let me prove you're not what you * seem.
Let me prove you're not just a * dream.
Let me love you.
Let me show you what could be. Let me show you * what I see.
Let me take you far away, let me give you my heart, * if there's a way.
Lend me your hand, and I'll * lead the way.
Let me love you, let me love you... today. (The "today" bit is quite cliched and, forgive me, but a little cheesy sounding. I'm positive there's another way to end the poem.)

Again, loved it, and keep it up!

-Kafka

I love it! The poem has lots of emotion in it and meaning. It's really good. I like the rhyme too.

I LOVED THIS!!!!! i wish I could have wrote it it was AMAZING even if it was short it was SWEET!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thanks so much for the reveiws, even when I may not have time to edit, I still read every one of them and I can use all the help I can get, so thank you!! All of you!

..They're right..Your poem is so transparent that you could see its soul just by reading it..It's so emotional and a bit cheesy, very typical for people walking in the boulevard of love?..You're in-love, are you not?..hahaha....What am i saying?..okay okay..I should be reviewing..I'm so sorry for that..Your poem has its spirit..It's great actually ,though, it will sound better if you revised the last line specially the word "today"..

..You have a talent..

..Keep writing!!