Cave/Forest Fire

As a school assignment, I had to write two poems using the Shi poetry format. Enjoy!

Cave
Slender path through the abyss, marred
by dying fluctuations and eternal sleep;
can we find crystals in the depths
of this silent magma? The echoes trace our steps.

Forest Fire
Great pillars of botany, mesh of endless
canopy; a spark, a fuse, now leaping
across the greenery; the Armageddon has been
released, and now life tears at the seam.

Though the first one may have gone completely over my head (I hope so), I loved "Forest Fire" because it so perfectly captures the state of life of which we live in: the slightest match and the entire thing can be aflame within moments! Great language that isn't too out there or "Thesaurasy" though I think you can definitely make your point much more vivid and not so lucid-but on the whole these are two very Kafka-esque poems, well done sir.

These are definiatly intresting, and have intrested me in the form of the poem you were writing. I think your words may need a little more work.