Faces From The Past

Faces From The Past

I tore them off.
Tore them off
Mercilessly off the walls.
I tore off the faces from the past.
They were only haunting memories now.
Meaningless.
Faceless.
Faceless.
They screamed
And they haunted.
They bothered and pestered
My grieving soul.
Remember me!
Remember me!
They screamed.
I did not hear.
For I did listen.
I did not look.
I tore.
I scratched at the now barren walls.
Empty and cold
Faceless
Nameless.
They stare at me.
They close me in.
The walls that once contained my
Life.
Gray and miserable.
I rock back and forth.
I close my eyes.
I breathe.
I will not remember.
I will not let them haunt me
Anymore.
I will not remember
These faces from the past.

I liked this, it was a really lovely poem.
I found it to be strong and the structure fitted well with it, kept it flowing.
I also liked the simplistic descriptions, it gave a good image. I felt like I was a watcher.
I especially liked:

I tore them off.
Tore them off
Mercilessly off the walls.

I made me feel the emotion your character is.
A lovely piece of poetry.
Well done!

Hello! I liked this poem. It was simple, but without using long, complicated sentences and flowery language it created a range of imagery well. Your short sentences really worked for the poem, as did the repitition of lines. It made the reader feel the emotions that the person must be feeling.
Good job!

I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. It was an explosion of emotion and imagery that evoked not only the haunting desire for peace, but savagery, and dehumanization, but at the same time creating a person who is human in inhumanity (another paradox!!!!). The simplistic language gives it a strong base. The short sentence structure gives more impact and does not ramble. I could feel the pain and the rage, the desire, and the hunger. I have personally felt every single one of those emotions on a large scale so I connect with this poem. I think many people can relate to this poem and the wide range of emotions which appear. Just one thing I found odd:

I did not hear.
For I did not listen.

Not should be added for that too make sense. That is the only thing that I found that would diminish this poem (perhaps I am bias, but I do not care heehee!!!!)

Spoiler

Also just saying this is a big paradox. Also a big contradiction in itself because you would not know this in first person if you did not hear or look or see, only tore. Heehee!!!!!!

Hmm, I liked this, but the repeats of certain phrases bothered me:

Faceless.
Faceless.

Here for example. The repeats seem unnecessary and draw me away from the main point. I guess it's probably just me, as no one else commented on that.

I liked the simple structure and short sentences a lot, as previous reviewers said. Great job!

This is a good poem with a great idea. The words flowed smoothly and didn't confuse me, which is good. The spelling is good and the grammar is also good. This is a great poem and I really liked it.

Keep writing, Tyler.