It's Missing You

SeeMySoul27 wrote:

This heartache is just long past due Not sure why you need the "just" here.
My mind goes insane with every thought of you "Insane" is so cliched. Think of another word for this.
It's missing you that makes me like this
Makes my every emotion an evil little twist Get rid of "little." But other than that I like this line.
It's crazy how you'll forever be in my thoughts It is? Seems like you're trying to explain why it isn't crazy.
The reminder of the time I got caught
Up in all this teenage drama girls seem to live off of Don't know if I like this line. Consider changing it.
This moment on will be the beginning of a new start Get rid of "on."
The rythemic beat of a stitched up heart It's spelled "rhythmic."
Reminding me of time spent with you
And the heartache I was able to get through
Reminding me of time spent with you
And the fact that I'm still missing Wait, you were just telling me that "you" were missing, and now you're telling me that it's you that's missing?

SeeMySoul27 wrote:This heartache is just long past due
My mind goes insane with every thought of you