Dreams - an illusion maybe

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Well first off welcome to YWS if you need any help just pm.... somebody or ask somebody who is green, they know things.

First off I really liked the idea, I just felt it was lacking something. I'm not going to go too much into nitpicks but you might want to read it for mistakes. As I was reading this I got this OMG/Barbie/bimbo/slightly dumb person vibe you might want to try and chaange that.
One last thing;

sweetnikki wrote:My mood was triumphant as I thought the sheer impossibility of what was just happening , I just couldn’t believe it , here I was sitting next to a person who I never ever thought would be of much importance in my life the very first day I saw him, which happened to be the day when I nearly fell of the stairs- trying to run for my nationalism class and texting Chetna on the way telling her that I have just reached and am up the stairs- I had forgotten that the same stairs that I was using to go up were also used by other people and me to come downstairs.

Do you expect people to breath? There isn't a SINGLE full stop in this entire part, you might want to insert those if you don't want people to faint/ pass out before finishing.

other than that very good, keep up the writing

- Tinkem